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    Cause A Fuss Truth Iscariot's Avatar
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    All I Know

    Oncoming traffic looks like
    Impending dread
    Headlights
    Brighter than Hell’s eyes
    Watching
    In brimstone shadow.

    I’m just trying to get
    Home
    Magical place
    I’ve struggled to find of late
    Stumbling paths
    Sometimes
    Can’t help but laugh
    The hiccups placed
    In my way
    By my favorite antagonist
    Fate…

    Would have it; so happens
    Happenstance or predetermination
    Has me damned.
    Clawing
    And scratching for an upper hand
    Yet under the boot of it all
    Befitting my fall
    My pride decried
    How humbleness calls
    And damn it I answered!
    Yet torment - relentless
    Bending me; endlessly
    It seems;
    Time is a relative thing
    I’m told.
    How it took
    An eternity to grow
    To adulthood,
    Now eternal strife is all I know.

    AI

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    Re: All I Know

    I liked how you staggered your flow. At times the rhyming was obviously, at other times, it was more camouflaged and internal. Lots of half rhymes and slants. I like shit like that. As for your content. It’s kind of hard to gauge. However, my interpretation of this piece is that it’s about adulthood and how it basically sucks. It’s like fighting an uphill battle, except the hill is slippery and wet — it’s hard to gain traction. Hard to get ahead. It’s a daunting task. That never seems to end. Every day is groundhogs day. I’m not sure if that was your actual intention. But after reading it twice that’s what I took away from it.

    “ By my favorite antagonist
    Fate…”


    “ And scratching for an upper hand
    Yet under the boot of it all
    Befitting my fall
    My pride decried
    How humbleness calls
    And damn it I answered!”


    Those were my two favorites parts.

    Really good read. I enjoyed!

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    Re: All I Know

    Nice!!!!
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    Re: All I Know

    Thank you guys

    AI

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    Re: All I Know

    Fuck outta here with your good shit

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