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    E X P L I C I T Zoshi's Avatar
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    Life Story

    Most of my childhood was in a daycare
    My Grandma had two jobs so I always had to stay there
    But that was only kinder, then I moved to first grade
    The teacher was sour, like unsweetened lemonade
    She was very old but she we never really got along
    When she asked me a question I would look away and wouldn't respond
    But then the end of the year came and I thought I was free
    But then came second, I wondered how could this be
    I had to go through all this grades until I turn eighteen
    Then comes college, I had to work like a machine
    So then I started second, the teacher wasn't any better
    All I had to do was practice writing letters
    It wasn't that bad until I got to third
    Thats when bullying started happening, my tears were never heard
    I had to find a way to fight back, so I can survive
    So I decided to man up, and leave my hatred all behind
    But I still wanted to rampage, throw a fury of fists
    To anybody that was written on my list
    So I had a fight with this kid who was the main reason
    Why I cried every night, But soon he was beaten
    I got kicked out of that school so then I went to fourth
    It started coming to me now, all I had to do was keep going north
    I still hated school, never really made any friends
    Even if I tried to make some, all it was was a dead end
    But then came 5th, where things actually started to change
    I made friends, But why so late in life? I found this part strange
    Now I passed 6th, this was probably my best year
    Where I had plenty of adventures, overcoming many fears

    This is probably the gayest rap I ever made
    Funnys My Name
    Raps My Game

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    Re: Life Story

    Yeah, this was pretty slow man. I woulda used more similie's and contrasts in this. Even a stronger rhyme scheme and vocab could of lightened this up bit. Not an original concept, soo you gota do more to make it stand out and not be ordinary, ya feel me? Keep writing tho fam!

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