afoot the dance floor
we, glide through the universe.
a waltz with the moons.
afoot the dance floor
we, glide through the universe.
a waltz with the moons.
This haiku wasn't too bad I actually like this simplicity of it.
it was serene, but that comes with the space and dance theme you were using here. I didn't like the comma, I think it gave an unnecessary break. It was still serene, calming, and interesting. Constellations twirling around in the sky.
JOHN!!!!!!!!!!
#WAASSSSUP MAN HOWS KANSAS TREATING YOU BROTHER?
@JMS
I actually like this haiku there Fat its very um romantic and whimsical at the same time. Good work.
The comma nearly ruined it! Other than that, great little haiku. It put pictures in my head, which is about the most flattering thing you can say about poetry.
Thanks guys...
Rtf leave links I will get to them
@Fatrick Swayze I don't have anything up but feel free to do someone else's instead
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