I know that you know...

[Spartacus]

So I actually wrote this as a country song for a buddy, but his label rushed his album completion and we didn't get to record it...

I'd reckon you'd be up Kansas way right 'bout now
And I'd bet you got that twinkle in those eyes
And I'd bet the whole farm you're having the time of your life
And I'd reckon your forgetting me bye and bye
Any other night I'd cuss myself for my actions
And I'd bet you'd say you forgive me, too
And I bet you're probably happy with your decisions
And you know I'd probably say I forgive you too

And you know that I know that you know that I've been thinking
And you know that I know that this is all my fault
And you know that I know that you know that I've been drinking
And I know all your reasons for why you took off

And id bet that bout now your lip gloss is shining
And I'd bet the Kansas moon puts them in rare form
And I'd bet that you're thinking about tommorow
And I'd bet it don't include you in my arms
And I know that you see yours and only your side
And you know it takes two to dance in the moon light
And I'd bet that for you leaving here was easy
But I know you think about me from time to time

Chorus

Bridge starts 8 kicks guitar solo

And if you get lonely you know you can call
But I won't be there to take that fall
Cuz I know that you know that I know that you that I know that you know
This is really all your fault

Chorus fade over guitar



Alright team, like I said its written for a country artist, but I think it can be extrapolated and molded for R&B... what do you think?

[Soule]

I think it's more fit for the poetry forum seeing as it's not got a steady rhyme scheme. As far as the piece goes, I don't like country or r&b so not really the guy to ask lol.

[Spartacus]

Than bro'

[Baron Mynd]

I think it's more fit for the poetry forum seeing as it's not got a steady rhyme scheme. As far as the piece goes, I don't like country or r&b so not really the guy to ask lol.

LOL

I don't think this should be posted in the poetry forum, this one seems fine. The 'rhyme scheme' or whatever you want to call it is less important to me here. I think the cadence and meter it has carries it. The piece flowed well enough to be able to follow and hear spat or sung. It was really emotional, without being too personal that the reader was lost midway through it. I can appreciate that. Often those are the hardest pieces to put out there, at least in my opinion/experience.

Much respect.

Keep that pen moving!