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    HOLY

    Happy holidays, as I landed in the show me state
    It's a holy day, I'll play Holy Grail feat. Timberlake
    I roll up the haze, I blaze it to put me on a daze
    As I start the day, blast the track and started the par-tay
    This is a charade, what's holy? As I listen closely
    On a morning day, I asked when I'm in my room lonely
    I put on my shades, starin at the mirror slowly
    I began to fade, as jay delivered his whole speech
    Then I felt amazed listening I began to feel holy
    But nothing holy pertains to the topic it's phony
    My auntie yells "Hey! Please turn down that devil music
    It's Jesus birthday" He can have his cake n consume it
    In the end I'll pay? Besides sundays, churches are useless
    And u must donate, goers are stupid cuz the holy guy loots it
    Who am I to say.."But I LOVE devil music auntie"
    Might call it child's play like Chucky, the devil's in me
    Diablo it's great, diabolical since adolescence
    But nobody prays, not even god's people in my presence
    Could hold me and bathe me in holy water, they're persistent
    Then I get afraid, they want to dismiss his existence
    Though he never strays, as an adult still question religions
    And at night I play, the weegie board giving depictions
    Every which way..they say god judge us to get sent down
    There's real pearly gates, prisons, and real judges wear black gowns

    TO BE CONTINUED...

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    Re: HOLY

    Upp

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    Re: HOLY

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    Re: HOLY

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    Re: HOLY

    Hmm not bad McKRaven... I liked the concept for sure, as I am an atheist. I thought the rhyme scheme was a little simple, but it still flowed nicely for the most part. Try messing with some multi's. I thought the ending was the best part of the song though, as I was kinda bored reading the first few bars. That last line did justice though, I like that.

    Every which way..they say god judge us to get sent down
    There's real pearly gates, prisons, and real judges wear black gowns


    Nice drop, I look forward to the continuation.

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    Re: HOLY

    Pretty decent read here. You stayed on topic and the flow was pretty smooth. I thought your humor was alright. ie: theres nothing holy about holy grail lol. Imo you should try working on schemes. Then again I havent seen enough from you to judge. Just my two cents. But decent lil piece man. Keep writing topicals and you will get better very fast
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