-Fall of a Demon-

[DopeHead]

an angel was born the last day of the year..
with the spirit of east coast and remains here..
knowin only innocents and pride..
but soon taunted by many that made him suicidal inside..
over time the emotion was hidden and pain..
the mental game drove him to be insane..
he mastered hate and seen much in return..
the sparks of hell where lit around ever turn..
money and drugs took over his life..
but before he was put back in jail he spoke to his future wife..
she calmed the demon with care and compassion..
its result was the fault why five less colors a year was flashin..
passion hit his dome along with dreams and hope..
his love was on the incline it was the fall of dope..
but a bad day came from mistakes on his part..
he sold his soul to the demon but lost his heart..
in the trenches holdin on the last thread..
with his cousin at his side to beat sense into his head..
but she called one day and he revived..
and realized she was the only reason he surrived..

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[Spoken]

iight

it wasnt all that bad, but i do find that it jumped really fast when you could have made this a longer, more pictured, felt piece. your vocab was pretty good, and the message of the piece was good, and different. i liked the part most about the innocence of babies then because of hate in the world, that it grows on them too. good piece

~Tera~
DONT HATE

[rule]

good drop, it was alright i think if you made ity longer it would have fell together more an been twice as good...but had great flow and imaginary...good drop homie...keep it up...check myn..peace

[Smooth JT]

Good peice. Can get a lot of different stuff outta this. Mostly what Is a person born and then there just just goes down hill. Thats what I can interperate. Well again, good drop. keep droppin, peace

[MoparMaddness]

Exellent writing dope. Was worth the read. It is very true to the heart and I feel what you are talking about. I know someone that can calm me down from anything. She is everything to me and I cant be with her. Im still very happy, she is still my best friend and she will be forever. Keep writin.

MM

[DthsMissingAngel]

WOW great drop. It pulled me in a lot and made me think. Made me imagine that I was in his place. Great job. Keep droppin. Most respect