Laughing stock of the sky.

[Deadbeatnik]

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[Deadbeatnik]

Appreciate feedback hurr

[FreshADiddle]

i've read this a few times...but have been lazy on the feed.

i'll edit this with feed tonight.

[Deadbeatnik]

sweet appreciated..

[Nika Subin]

Oh wowzers. Kind of neat actually. Check it:

Start reading it, it establishes a simplistic but intentful flowing style that kept it a smooth read. Nice. What's actually being said though comes off as something out of I really know... anthropomorphizing the sun like that is something I've never really seen done the way you have.

Now it goes on and demonstrates this clear well... lack of a better term... quality of light too it. In fact, this quality of light fills much of the content to the point that when things switch over to the dark side again, it comes as completely unexpected. Emotionally speaking I felt a great sense of innocence throughout even to the end. I found myself wondering what this character subject named "I" was going to do about a laughing sky. Or even why the sky would behave in such manner to begin with?

Of course, as a poem, such questions are rarely or even necessary to be answered. Thats where the reader steps in and answers the question themselves. As a poetry peace, I must say this was indeed a well read and I found myself enjoying it.