I'm The History. (First Post)

[theprojekt]

hey this is my first time posting, this is a full song so let me know what you think:

I was born a fighter, even though my skins whiter,
my heart my soul's a lighter, I spit like Mr. Carter

I'm the history, the mystery
the number one enemy
I ain't never stopping
I'm gonna keep on dropping

Eminem till i collaspe, keep dropping these raps
place me down in the straps, I'm having a relapse

Fuck the people,
who always got a problem with me
but never have the fucking guts
to battle against me

I'm number one, its begun
standing ready with my gun
spare no one, its begun
time to fuckin have some fun

So I here go again, back again, once again
So I here go again, suggest you try amen

So here's the final test, I'm surely not impressed
the cops still tryna arrest, acting they like are possessed

So listen up
I ain't gon say this shit twice
so I suggest you listen closely
take my word of advice

They call me
the number one public enemy,
my name will live on
throughout the world's history

My heart and my soul are my artillery
Its all need to commit, this act of savagery

So have the respect for me
I'm the enemy
There is no fucking end of me
I'll let you see
Put ya outta ya misery
The emcee
This is how I'm supposed to be

They continue to press charges to bring myself
into custody but I am just like everyone else

I speak the words in my mind, its what ive been assigned
to show you and remind that we are one single kind

That in this world,
we are all the enemies trying to please
our desires and our needs

So wont you please
this is my expertise, I'm a disease
transmitted overseas

I was born a fighter, even tho my skins whiter
my heart my soul's a lighter, I spit like Mr. Carter

I'm the history, the mystery
the number one enemy
I ain't going nowhere
fuckers better prepare.


feedback will be returned.

[theprojekt]

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[The Genesis]

you have alot of work to do, I'm guessing you just started? this shit wasn't good, straight up, but just keep writing and studying music, maybe some shit other than eminem, and you'll get better in no time, stick with it.

[Sniper Clown]

glue them together even more.... u cud've used actual eminem's quotes from his various albums and then piece by piece join concatenate to form a kool piece...

you had the idea, but not the execution. ok as first post...

[theprojekt]

thanks for the feedback guys. and yeah i just started so guess i have alot of work to do.