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    Thumbs up As The Philosopher Speaks.....

    As The Philosopher Speaks


    "The time is now, when a scribe amongst many eyes releases his soul on a stage designed to hold only the weight of this man and his notions....."

    *A Grunt with a sudden "ahem"...and the Crowd is Silent*

    The diamonds will weep, I'm shining and defining my heat
    eyelids repeat, blinking till the morning Sun will retreat//

    From the musical Jesters all the way to hopeless diseased
    Glorious creeds sit together as their eardrums are pleased//

    My vocals acheived, a certain point of hopeful decreed
    Hear me over the seas till courses of the oceans deplete//

    Some horses decease, the feeders are so focused on me
    children gripping their knees, the toilet rooms are broken you see//

    The locust are weak compared to swarms of hopeless beliefs
    soaking the folks of many villages with bogus relief//

    Warriors cope with the speech, looking at vulterous beasts
    that fly above unholy victims with some blood on their beaks//

    Smiles of sulfurous teeth expressing some joy that is deep
    inside of a peasants heart which suddenly is making a beat//

    Hearing me preach, people defeat the inner moments of grief
    money is cheap so live your life with many rotating speeds//

    The diagnosis, feeble dignity in all of these people
    The silent reaper preys on dieing prayers into cathedrals//

    And now I'll measure the distance from where your opticals reached
    From witnessing the outer power when philosophers speak//

    End....

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    Re: As The Philosopher Speaks.....

    Notebook, this shit is dope. I seen a couple of your drops that were hot shit.

    The diamonds will weep, I'm shining and defining my heat
    eyelids repeat, blinking till the morning Sun will retreat//


    Sick as fuck. I like your style in using your multi's. I can tell this is probably going to be stepped on because it is complex, but this is definately deserving of major props.

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    Re: As The Philosopher Speaks.....

    thanks man...

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    Re: As The Philosopher Speaks.....

    no sleepers on this one please....

    uppin...

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    Re: As The Philosopher Speaks.....

    Killed it basically, flow on point the vocab, multis and wordplay were all together nicely done... Im looking for more of ya shit..Peace....


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    Re: As The Philosopher Speaks.....

    thanks...if its good enough guys nominate plz...hope its good enough

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    Notebook, this shit is dope but the more you up your own shit, the more niggas gonna get turned off. The feed will come when it comes. Ya dig?

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    I like your style

    Forreal though, your flow is tight, your vocab is exemplary, and your multi's are dope. Everything about this is dope. I'm def. gonna keep an eye on you.

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    Re: As The Philosopher Speaks.....

    thank you....

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    pretty good piece...before i get to the good...let me get to the bad....don't seperate every bar...and don't put // at the end of them. Why? theres really no reason, other then a lot of people here who are respected as writers...the people you actually want feedback from...won't pay any attention to your verse if they see those...they will immediately exit out as they see those attatched to the end of lines. anyways...for the most part..this was pretty good like i said..everything was on point..the only things you can really improve on..are things that will come with time...you're already on your way. that being said....my favorite bar was

    The locust are weak compared to swarms of hopeless beliefs
    soaking the folks of many villages with bogus relief//

    that was ill...real talk


    stay up man...keep at it
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    I remember when Braille first appeared on the scene, we were all kids and we were in awe of the greying beard and wisdom.

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    Re: As The Philosopher Speaks.....

    thanks


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    Re: As The Philosopher Speaks.....

    uppin...

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    Re: As The Philosopher Speaks.....

    quit upping your fucking piece...it doesn't need to be above everybody elses...if you want feed....go feed on others pieces.
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    Originally Posted by P. Mortuus
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    I remember when Braille first appeared on the scene, we were all kids and we were in awe of the greying beard and wisdom.

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    Re: As The Philosopher Speaks.....

    Braille suck my dick....!!!!!!!!!!

    anyway hes right im done uppin...

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