Chamber of Solitude

[Spoken]

Chamber of Solitude
-upon the grey clouds



Feel the pressure bump your skin,
riding friendly with the wind;
knocking at your door…
…ready to come on in.
a situation you win-
A situation your in,
Purified of all its helium;
the trip is worth the sin.
Dump the trash in the bin,
your eyes fall asleep…
…Like rain tapping on the tin.
Your own music medley turned song,
your conscience is gone;
It took a vacation…
…To go and get it’s Smile on.
Happy like a grade A class honary,
Averaged appreciation? –probably
in the hidden shadows….
…your life chronological monopoly;
Quite Possibly-
Thoughts are processing logically.
with just a hint of split mockery.
Words fasten themselves…
…for self pre-caution;
Percussion of oxygen,
just stands as a back up option.
-which still remains optional
Qualified of my own mastery,
the art spills drastically;
and my words of action…
…can’t describe this pain of battery.
They string up my bits and pieces,
that’s thrown away…
… Like last weeks Reese’s
I tried to proclaim a thesis;
but it just wasn’t enough,
My heart fell apart like burnt crust;
all was lost with trust…
...dipped into the bucket of “can’t touch”
or even feel,
the pain was too pandemic…
…to even tell whether if it was real.
I take the wheel and steer,
hold you close when you are near;
You take away all of my fears,
Like a magic show…
…I BLINK!
.
.
Then
.
.
you
.
.
Disappear

I Just can’t believe
.
.
…Something so pure could ever leave,
But I guess you can say it was destiny.

“damn we’re out…
…shit”

I’m going to get another baggy!

[Spoken]

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[Writeamus Prime]

aight...i'll get to the story in a minute...firstly...the flow was cool and um...the imagery was deceiving lol...the emotion was rather whimsical as well...the story was well put together and thought out...no to the story...i thought you were talking about like a lost love that made you feel this way when she was around...even if not a lost love just a person in general...then when i get to the last line....i find that you are talking about weed? lol hope im right..let me know if i'm wrong though...but good job nonetheless...cheers

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...gy-365165.html

hit this up my dude...its....different to say the least...hope you enjoy.

[Cody Nash]

pretty crazy piece... but with this concept, the writing usually is crazy and misleading... it's dope to see you're still on game write. I didn't slip up at all, and you still got that original style you're bringing to the table. the concept seems straight forward when you hit the end, at first when you're reading, you're wanting to know what you're reading about as you go on. then you hit the end and you're like, "oh shit." [we're out, haha]... but yeah, I liked the read a lot. real enjoyable... I suppose I'll give it a nomination. thought it was some beast writing for just returning from absence on your part. good shit bro... stay up...



- Nash




if you can, go in PS and hit up "The Other Side"... it'll make your mother cry.

[P. Mortuus]

I liked this...simple flow and a good fluid read. There was one line I wasn't so sure about which was the "Life chronological monopoly"...I think it wasn't really necassery to be honest...however, other than me being picky and nit picking I actuall found this an enjoyable laid back read. Easy to get into and understand the topic. Good work man, good to see your back and putting effort in writing.

[Ntalek]

Well well well Mr.Write. what do we have here?lol

First off I thought that the structure was dope and you pulled off the short lines well..though the rhyme scheme and vocab were simple it still worked out for the better in this piece...and like every one else said while reading I yearned to know what it was that you were talking about then it hit you at the end...so dope execution on that part..it really brought me into the read a bit more ....you had all the right mechanic's tuning this machine..as it worked it's way through my head...so overall nice read.and glad to see you back at it again...