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    "I'm so fucking Emo"

    I'm just emo man....I ain't mad at Y'all
    but at least I can respect Hitler for having Balls
    soldiers in Iraq are dying its you they defend
    but you sit there dying for feeds to ya new OM
    I'm not anti-semitic or some kinda neo-Nazi's
    Sometimes i wish someone genocided complacent Emcees
    so when I wake up it wouldn't be your face that I see
    this hate that I breed is American and raw
    I'm being real don't care if it failed to leave you in Awe....
    I have the sincerity of a diary book entry
    and enough vocabulary to be the illest writer of my Century
    I grab my revolver wishing it could hold ten
    I respect mariah noelle more than some of you Grown Men
    y'all reads so boring make me wanna sniff coke till my nose bend
    this might get you upset and kinda rock ya world
    one of the illest emcees here is a 14 yr old white girl
    I could give a fuck if they rape me or Adore me
    sometimes I pray I get banned cause y'all so Corny
    they say flatterers is like wolves so I'd rather you hate
    I'd quit but then I would be quickly Replaced
    with another overpassionate motherfucker without a face
    He'll say the same things I did and his rhyme will get Erased
    Could give a damn if you think I'm all in bad taste
    I never wanted to drop a scrumptious read
    I'll leave you with shrunken gums and ugly teeth.
    Bitch, I'm EMO.

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    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...ro-357722.html

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    Re: "I'm so fucking Emo"

    Nice piece, i can see that you were writing from the heart
    and really- thats all that matters, emotion was strong and
    used in the right way, structure was cool- but i dont see any
    real reason to give you critique here, cause you already stated
    that you didnt care, and since you wrote this from the heart
    it cant really be critiqued, but keep writing and youll soon elevate
    to be one of the nicest writers on this site.

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    Re: "I'm so fucking Emo"

    ok if this can be separated into two parts, i'll say the stronger part is the last half. since i am ur friend if i start kissin up on ya ppl would be i am dick riding so here i go wit some harsh comments...

    Quote Originally Posted by Sinizter G. View Post

    I'm just emo man....I ain't mad at Y'all
    but at least I can respect Hitler for having Balls
    soldiers in Iraq are dying its you they defend
    but you sit there dying for feeds to ya new OM

    thass like totally random....wat does the second bar have to do with the first one?


    I'm not anti-semitic or some kinda neo-Nazi's

    love the anti-thesis and word play here

    Sometimes i wish someone genocided complacent Emcees
    so when I wake up it wouldn't be your face that I see

    if i see one more bar where emcee is rhymed with 'see'...

    this hate that I breed is American and raw
    I'm being real don't care if it failed to leave you in Awe....

    2nd part gets better

    Quote Originally Posted by Sinizter G. View Post

    I respect mariah noelle more than some of you Grown Men

    like this line

    sometimes I pray I get banned cause y'all so Corny
    they say flatterers is like wolves so I'd rather you hate
    I'd quit but then I would be quickly Replaced
    with another overpassionate motherfucker without a face

    very strong and love the imagery


    I never wanted to drop a scrumptious read

    i gotta look up 'scurmptious'

    I'll leave you with shrunken gums and ugly teeth.
    Bitch, I'm EMO.

    good
    overall tight drop....but you need it make it sth. that can be read over and over and over again and everytime one reads it fresh they discover sth. new. cuz that's what art is all about. keep droppin' and fuck the haters!

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    Re: "I'm so fucking Emo"

    i felt this yo but i agree the second half was a lil tighter. it seems like the more u wrote the more u got into it but overall i thought this was tight.
    notice when i'm posted and feed me when u see me

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    Re: "I'm so fucking Emo"

    , the read was interesting and the title was funny. a real eye grabber only i didnt see the relation between title and verse
    Not many multis but the rhymes were good. Apparently i mistook some of the content. I'm a bit fatigued now but i'l fix it. Your verse had a lot of feeling put into it. I'm assuming you had some kind of incident with other members. material deleted?. Points for emotion.


    Best bit
    they say flatterers is like wolves so I'd rather you hate
    I'd quit but then I would be quickly Replaced
    with another overpassionate motherfucker without a face
    He'll say the same things I did and his rhyme will get Erased
    Could give a damn if you think I'm all in bad taste
    actually pretty good.
    Last edited by Morbid Dream; January 14th, 2008 at 01:46 AM
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    Re: "I'm so fucking Emo"

    He was referring to mariah^.

    lmao

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    Re: "I'm so fucking Emo"

    ^rotfl...he was talking about another member that just so happens to be a 14 year old girl.

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    Re: "I'm so fucking Emo"

    ^^^Ha? What? What are you talking about ? ROFL
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    Re: "I'm so fucking Emo"

    I respect mariah noelle more than some of you Grown Men
    y'all reads so boring make me wanna sniff coke till my nose bend
    this might get you upset and kinda rock ya world
    one of the illest emcees here is a 14 yr old white girl
    Ledg, lol what are you talking about?

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    Re: "I'm so fucking Emo"

    thanks for the shout out...wtf @ all the hate...I pwn you all cept Ledge...he my buddy.
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    Re: "I'm so fucking Emo"

    this piece was cool fam...i like the emotion here it actually inspired me to hit off a bit of a rant in my piece taps...so away from my segway to my stuff...you spoke alot of truth in your drop and you did it with a good flow and emotion as i said before...its funny how when you speak that speak...people come in your ish and start conversations about other things...ignoring the whole point of what you were doing...so i give you props and kudos...be sure to hit up my taps joint when you get a chance...its my last piece for a while, unless something forces me to change my mind...bit of a kiss my ass type piece...and you might need a dictionary for this one...wink wink hint hint

    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...ps-357925.html

    ^^enjoy

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    Re: "I'm so fucking Emo"

    Quote Originally Posted by Morbid Dream View Post
    Yeah not bad. didnt know you were a girl though. Wouldve thought you were a heiroine. aside from it, the read was interesting and the title was funny. a real eye grabber only i didnt see the relation between title and verse
    Not many multis but the rhymes were good. Apparently i mistook some of the content. I'm a bit fatigued now but i'l fix it. Your verse had a lot of feeling put into it. I'm assuming you had some kind of incident other member. material deleted?. Points for emotion.


    Best bit


    actually pretty good.
    Yeah...I'ma guy.....I was talking bout mariah....

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    Re: "I'm so fucking Emo"

    Quote Originally Posted by Mariah Noelle View Post
    thanks for the shout out...wtf @ all the hate...I pwn you all cept Ledge...he my buddy.
    Dont kid yaself lil buddy lol

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    Re: "I'm so fucking Emo"

    Quote Originally Posted by Levathious.. View Post
    Dont kid yaself lil buddy lol
    both of y'all is my homies......
    but I'd love to see this one go down.

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    Re: "I'm so fucking Emo"

    Quote Originally Posted by Mariah Noelle View Post
    thanks for the shout out...wtf @ all the hate...I pwn you all cept Ledge...he my buddy.
    until i step in..

    wtf happened to my shout out!? *killsself*

    oh well, nice piece, a little weird and not really a concept to it.. but overall it was decent.. you are working on the basics, and keep getting the basics to look nice and you can move on to bigger stuff.. and it'll turn into the snowball effect. keep writing dude, you have potential. keep reading pieces, and keep writing.. hopefully you'll be in SS someday
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