Ashes.

[Tebo]

I like it, I can't really explain what I was trying to say in my first response so forget it.

I think rhyme scheme is 10/10 for flow, I think the scheme and plot is a 9.5/10, this is the best new work I have seen since I joined.

I read ur thing in legends & I liked that poem also, but the rhyme scheme of this is nearly perfect.

Check my post, ''Life of a Ghetto Child'' whenever you can get a chance, thanks.

[Tebo]

P.S. The Front Line battle forum needs you , since your the best battler ever, why you not battle there anymore, or did you ever? Just curious & sorry for creating a off topic question to you sir.

[Nique.]

I thought I responded to this, but then I realized that I did in the SS forum, but not here. Anyway, the flow is bananas as usual. Your ability to easily captivate the reader and capture his/her interests immediately reminds me of the way most of my pieces are written. I don't do it purposely, but I just like to flow. The story itself was a bit cliche, but regardless it was an interesting and you make such a good piece seem so effortless. Good stuff Evolve.

[The Vortex]

yeah i done quote on this in SS. flow was fluent . what i liked motly was the way the wordplays all seemed to compliment each-other . this made it a cool read. like only thing i thought was it needed just a few more lines of story to fill the belly...multie chain shit was banging thats what i'm talking about. ha
i'm here for the rap and rhymes


yeah smoking is kinda a shitty thing,.but i still blaze buds like whoa


pz1

[Evolve]

Thanks Nique and Vortex... ur opinions are respected.