Yes I got you, it may take some time though but I'll get you the feed, Thanks for the comments.
Yes I got you, it may take some time though but I'll get you the feed, Thanks for the comments.
Nice Piece Dusk You Already Know I Respect You As A Lyrcist But Homie This Was Short And Crisp And Violently Brought The Point Across...the Only Thing I Think It Lacked(and You Know I Gotta Throw My Two Sense In Cause We Homies) Was Emotion....but Then Again Killers Rarely Show Emotion So Ths Might Have Enhanced It....imagery Was Good.....vokab Was More Than On Point.....truthfully Wanna Say This Is Probably One Of The Best Pieces I Have Read From You....keep It Raw Homie!!!!!!!
I EMBRACED THE DARK SIDE WHEN YOU STOLE MY SON
this was an ok piece but i cant give you too much feed because of its lenght it was a nice piece evertyhing was on key flow,structure all you need to word on is emotion and lenght i rate this piece 7/Ten
Bump.
bump.
Originally Posted by ~Vertikle~
Yous a hata and a fag...thats scard to battle a bitch nigga......
okay back to the piece.....
i was definitely feeling this...omigod the way u used the vocab was sick. the imagery was definitely there as well. nice work.
it was alright. not really likeable for me. i know EVERYONE else is giving you props and shit here but it just didn't go right with me. it seemed like at some parts you were just trying to rhyme and the lines you'd write had NOTHING to do with the piece. your wording and shit was awsome, i just hated the way you worded your story. it was kind of short as well, and seemed more along the lines of a Poetry piece than anything. it was good in it's own sort of unique way though, decent read. not my favorite in all honesty. decent in my eyes ..
!Nash
that was good shit dog
im feelin the whole war thing
good verse
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