A Girl Of My Dreams

[Lil Drew]

This girl of dreams thats a white gurl and cute with a nice body and
she's a real hottie,
she's about five foot three and every time when i see her i can feel the heat its about more than hundred degrees,
she gotta good lookin butt makes me when ask her if u wanna get fuck,
she might wanna my blow dick she's probably the head master,
but anyways she's smells good so god damn helluva good,
she's got brown hair and pretty brown eye's she like a fly white guy(me),
her skin is sexy tan makes her so god damn good lookin with a white man,
i wanna her so bad but she gotta man and for me that god damn bad,
cause if weren't for me to be shy walkin to girl and not lookin like a fly guy,
so this time im not lose a girl of dreams,
ima get that girl of my dreams...

Open Mics
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...75#post2964275
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...=1#post2964288

[D.V.R.a.k.a.M.C.]

This made no sense to me. Elevate. You ahd stretched lines. And it flowed horrible. Work on vocab. Work on everything. And please try to rhyme.

[Lil Drew]

i'll Try Harder

[Punch_Line_King]

This made no sense to me. Elevate. You ahd stretched lines. And it flowed horrible. Work on vocab. Work on everything. And please try to rhyme.

same hea homie....i think u can do alot betta den dis here...keep elevatin and get cha vocab up...

keep elevatin

[B.P.S]

i aint ganna bag on u dogg i'll give you props u at least had the balls ta get on and throw ya lyrics down. . . . . but just a few pointers get ya vocab up and hit me up and we'll battle

[Legacy01]

if anything, you should try and put this as a poetic piece, at least it'll make more sense as to why it is ere... was a "different" read....but thats how i'd picture this piece... elevate!!

[LiL*WiCkEd]

gte off the white black BS dogg it dont go together wit rhymes.... i really dont even know what to say

[K9_THESHIT]

wtf did you upped this bullshit?