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    Kung Flow Presents: Setting the Stage

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    Wrote this off the top.


    Setting the Stage

    I climb the long steps to the shrine where the illest minds gather
    Ignoring the mindless chatter from the newb's who climb after
    The dojo of the flow, the sacred training grounds
    Where techniques are perfected, we vent our pain in sound
    The oaken doors creak open, i wipe the sweat from my brow
    The sight of these sacred halls is never letting us down
    It's been a long time, now i seek to finish what i started
    And my students crowd behind me, diminished and retarded
    But they'll rise as sure as feathers on a perpetual updraught
    From the winds of change climbing, like their training must last
    I slump on a nearby bench, wipe the dust from the seat
    And start composing a beat to knock the rust from our heat
    It begins today, the evolution from students to masters
    The knowledge to blast words and spot the movements of bastards
    The first sparring match begins, combatents circle each other
    Imitating forgotten art forms, reversing from cover
    Of the clouds of ignorance, screams rend the air
    Someone falls bleeding, the students crowd, then they stare
    The casuality is treated, and i order the stop
    Ask them to line up, tell them of borders to hop:

    "The first rule you must learn is patience and understanding
    This training will be demanding, it requires delicate handling
    Respect your fellow artists and pool your ideas
    Gain intelligence, know what's relevant and move through years
    This is the first step, you'll experience pain and sorrow
    It's the same old motto, you'll probably get the same tomorrow
    But don't dispair, me and the other vets are here to guide you
    Take your mind through barriers, and when the time's due
    You'll get your freedom back, and you'll leave this college
    And become wiser after you recieve this knowledge"


    The first lesson was learned and now the stage is set
    The saga begins of Kung Flow's amazing vet's!


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    nice shit homie I like this right here the lyrics were tight the flow structure everything wazz good nice drop Johnny keep this up man I liked this peice it was good for a off the dome man so I give this here a 8/10 good drop definetly above average andgood luck wit ya crew homie ~1~

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    the movement of bastards, .. ha that made me smile,
    i was thinking yesterday about doing something similar being somewhat of a martial artist myself...
    nice poetic assonance throughout.. i'd say the end two lines college rhyming with knowledge was'nt quite up to the complexity of the other on point rhymes, but i guess it being multified made up for that,.
    i like the style and aggression of the flow.

    maybe i cud get down wit this Kung, imma holl@ tho

    pz
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    Another nice piece, the flow was tight as usual your upping your vocab now too its making your pieces more complex. i always like reading your verses cause there always original this wasnt no different.
    The imagery was great there was kind of a story to it but without characters it was crazy, i couldnt really say anything bad about it except you could of made another verse and then made this into an audio. Keep writing.

    Return the feed on my new piece id appreciate it: Disect The Following:
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    ^^uppin this thing^^

    cheers for the feedback.

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    i do martial arts, so this was touching home...

    good vocab, good imagry, structure and flow... nothing bad about it... unique idea and topic... i like this...

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    ^^uppity-uppy-uppin^^

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    Thanks for the feed on Life's Cities...

    This was good... It's not the typical story OM, it was more crossed with an audio style. I enjoyed reading it... It flowed well and you used good vocabulary. I prefer the more complex, image heavy OMs, however, I recognize this as a good piece in its genre. I know you can write OMs that are complex and "image heavy", so it doesn't particularly bother me. This was enjoyable, which is pretty much all that matters... Nice work...

    Keep it up...
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    well hmm you had a nice stucture and a very consistant flow, the rhyme scheme wasn't so great though your words were lower case i usually see you come out better being big with words. but the thing is your imagery you always have an interesting story to tell which really makes your piece good ya know, imageyr is a part of you when you write thats a good thing to have good, so keep it like that but keep trying to up the vocab. 1

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    Well Well Well.....

    Another Dope Drop From My Good Friend Mister 6 Feet, It Amazes Me How You Always Seem To Put A Picture In My Head With Your Rhymes.
    This Is A Good Addition To The Dojo Chapters, Your Imagery Is Dope As Always And Vocabulary Was Top Notch, My Favourite Lines Where....

    ''I slump on a nearby bench, wipe the dust from the seat
    And start composing a beat to knock the rust from our heat
    It begins today, the evolution from students to masters
    The knowledge to blast words and spot the movements of bastards''


    Lmao @ The Movement Of Bastards, Made Me Laugh
    Anyway Looking Forward To Seeing More From You And Can't Wait To Drop Another Collab Or Two With You Again Or Maybe Another Fifty
    Keep Dropping Your iLLness And I'll Keep Replying

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    This was a nice pice man, I wa definately feelin tha style because it was so priminant, I look forward to readin more of ya stuff ta see if the style is tha same, cause it fits ya...

    The structure was good, too, it was well put together for having such diverse lyrice which envoked a different feeling when I read it than I usually get when I'm readin these...


    good shit man...
    peace

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    The flow in this was very consistent and the story was sick.. I liked how it keep my attention the whole way through.. The imagery was good but then 2 lines in the middle sort of through me off but other then that it was a tight piece..

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    Nice way to rep.
    I like this piece because of the emotion you chose and it felt like it was on a deep/hardcore level. You got nice rhymeschemes and the story-telling within it is cool. The concepts hot and keep writing.

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    Upping This For More Replies

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    yo let me be in this shit
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