"Scars of Life"

[Dae One]

heres my 2 threads i posted replies to......

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...15#post2661115
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=206453


chorus
From slit wrists, to blood, sweat and tears, these emotions make my mental crumble, it's been eroding for years/
So if i snap and take a leap from the edge, will i be missed, it's these scars of life that got me dreaming like this...../


verse 1

Is he this, is he that, you'll neva figure me out/
Hes a menace, he's insane, y tha fuck did they let him out/
Like a mutt on tha prowl, secret intentions hide tha truth/
And blind my eyes till i'm not seeing whats true/
Lifes got me ready to spew, this hatred flowing in my veins/
Is like a overdose of pain, its got my mind shackled in chains/
Dont force my play, this aint a game, my forceful plays for ever changed/
The way this world perceives my name, and keeps officials gettin paid/
Like i'm trapped in thuggish ways, I have flashbacks of prison days/
The only way to keep from going crazed is roll a blunt and blaze/
Keep my nerves grounded to earth, staying fuced up's the only thing that ever worked/
When life bites, it fucn hurts/
I'm paitiently waiting for judgement day, to call my name/
I'm ready for the wrath i've got coming my way/
Cuz my realitys lost fate, i sip beam in a lost state/
To neautralize tha pain, and walk around in a daze/
4-real




i got this posted as an audio as well....the beat is phat and it has the whole song in the audio section.....p'z

[Dae One]

^^^^^

[Foreshadow]

I'm glad to read this because this piece actually had a point to it.. I liked the internal rhyme scheme.. The only thing that I felt was off besides your vocab and shit was that the lines and the syllable count and what not..

[Xclusiv One]

this piece was decent allthough i found it to be a lil short, it was kind of a let down, cause it was a ok topic...
I look forwrd to readin gsumthin a lil more expansive from you in tha near future...

peace

[Dae One]

the full song is posted in audio.....apprectiate the replies

[.Symbol.]

It was a good open mic i liked it nice meta yo i was feelin ya whole verse man for real keep it up

[Dae One]

up...up....and away

[Dae One]

^^^^^^^^^

[Hype]

yo this shit was a good drop i like that it actually had a reason behind it the flow was strait u should work a lil on ur vocab tho but the rest is good

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