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  1. April 15th, 2005, 07:07 PM #1
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    The Return (Po'Ethics)

    The Return (Po'Ethics)
    Written By: ELEETE

    Like the calm before the storm, Im ready to disturb the norm...
    Release my words in swarms, When I spit my flow an form...
    Im so informed intelligence is evident within my presence...
    I calculate distorted elements, to make the world irrelevant...
    Fuck the selibate, ill have you knelt an' bent...
    I dont speak the truth, I say shit for the hell of it...
    Just listen when I’m telling’ it, I hold the world in selfishness…
    Shatter all your bones, when I’m exposin’ all my skeletons…
    Cleaning up my closet, the smell just makes me nauseous…
    Egg shell walking never, so I don’t proceed with caution…
    An fuck the ransom, ill hold you up for auction...
    Ill never hold you hostage, deaths the only option...
    My Vision was Corrupted before Po' Ethics had me abducted...
    Now I inject sight so obstructed thats too intense for lenses to fuck wit...
    I aint mad, no I aint upset, your crew aint worth all dumb shit...
    Ill tell you what I think of it...Hmmm nevermind fuck it...
    I was left cold in my own zone, prone to let go of my own home...
    You sampled my DNA now your try to form your own clones?..
    No no, im unpredictable like the vile and despicable...
    Ill rip a fool who tries to depict ELEETE just an inch or two...
    See verbally i'm increasing the level of infected microphone acrobatics...
    It's easy, inject the vemon discretely, an watch Emcees die ina frantic...
    But its too complicated for you to contemplate my status...
    My flow ive mastered...for you it'd take a million years of practice...
    What you did wasnt comprehensible...but your easily dispensable...
    Hence the flow...so when your ready say "Lets Go!"
    From you its expectable...you lack the testicles...
    And this shit just aint a verse...this shits Po'Ethical...

    Sorry it had to be this way...

    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=186196
    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=184160
    Last edited by ELEETE; April 15th, 2005 at 07:29 PM

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  2. April 15th, 2005, 07:47 PM #2
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    first time i read your work man...i like it...glad to see more tallent in OM cuz lately it sucked...

    now for your drop...good piece man.i liked your rhymescheme(not predictable) and your flow.the piece really flowed well to me as i was reading it.your begining was very nice...the first 4 lines,especially this one :"I calculate distorted elements, to make the world irrelevant..."-you're creative man...and also some nice wordplay in there.the vocabulary was good,but in a few places you could've tried some upper words to make your point a bit better...i'll be looking for your next one...Keep it up man!
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  3. April 15th, 2005, 07:48 PM #3
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    Goddamn.

    I love this. So full of emotion. Sorry about the short reply, but I swear to god that I'll reply to this when I get back. *pissed I have to go*
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  4. April 15th, 2005, 07:56 PM #4
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    this was a nice piece....I liked the overall concept about Po Ethics and your return, I really havent seen you, now im looking foward to seeing you do more OM's and topicals, I like ur rhyme scheme and everything, there is really nothing to critique, Good piece man Props to you, and You havent seen my topicals and shit becuase that was only my second topical ever, well gl to you, Peace
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  5. April 15th, 2005, 08:00 PM #5
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    very very nice indeed
    I liked ur flow and tha whole concept also. This is also tha first puiece of urs I ahve read and am going to strat readin mroe of urs...excellent dawg
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  6. April 16th, 2005, 05:19 AM #6
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    It's weird... You replied to my first rap ever at the beginning of February when I was nothing... 6 posts... You said I had potential... Now I'm in the same crew as you.

    It's nice to see you've come back and you're contributing to this forum as it is struggling. However, this piece was, above all, very good. You maintained an excellent flow throughout and used great vocabulary. You wrote well consistantly through this piece with some very good lines. You used good assonance and such which also added to this... I enjoyed reading this and seeing your take on your return... Was interesting.

    Main thing for me to say I suppose is Welcome Back!

    Nice piece... If you could check out "It's Pitch Black" I'd appreciate it...

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  7. April 16th, 2005, 08:25 AM #7
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    Ha, damn yo. I thought that was dope. It was very emotional, and I'm sure that it was very real. You wrote a rant, in a dope ass way. You used very good flow, smart puns, great vocabulary, and a damn strong tone. This was very good to read, in the sense that I didn't feel boggled down by lines that were just bullshit, it seemed like every line in this piece had a purpose. I'm not sure how much time you've spent on this, but if this was just a glimpse of how dope you are, then I'm glad to have you in Po'Ethics. I'll leave feed anytime you want man. Yesterday I just had some shit to do. But back to the piece, yeah, it was written cleverly, obviously you have beef with CV, but they seem pretty much dead anyways, so this looks like the last nail in the coffin. To me, this wasn't a diss so much, as it was a piece of a new begining, of growing and becoming better. Overall, this was damn good, clever, very interesting to read, and I hope you keep dropping so I can reply some more.
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  8. April 16th, 2005, 12:01 PM #8
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    Very nice drop here. As many before me have said your emotion really showed throughout the entire verse. It was also very consistant through out the pece, which is something that is hard to find nowadays in OM. Flow and structure were on point and your vocab was well above par. It kinda seemed like a mix between a battle verse and a topical write to me, which is something I think is hard to pull off successfuly, but you did it very well here. Once again nice piece man, and will definatly be lookin for more stuf from you.

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  9. April 16th, 2005, 05:54 PM #9
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    Yo appreciate all of you! Leave a link ill be sure to hit it up...Deviate ill hit yours ASAP...

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  10. April 17th, 2005, 02:04 AM #10
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    very nice. i have been a fan of you ever since i first read your work. this was nice. your first 8 lines were dippity dope. i liked your wordplay and rhyme scheme. that line about microphone acrobatics was cool it made me say oh yeah like kool-aid. your multi's and wit carried this piece and if i say so this was one hell of a coming back to end wack rant. kudos
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  11. April 17th, 2005, 03:29 AM #11
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    standard sort of subject matter but you carried it off well. some good one-liners like the scattering skeletons line, that clone line, etc. good vocab as well but i thought your bars were uneven in a few places, equalised lines makes for a better flow. Solid multis whne you used them. Good boasts as well.

    good read overall, keep posting and if you could rep one of one mine in return i'd appricaite it.
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