Dear No One

[Poetic Realness]

I am so miserable.
Dear No One

My life feels like it has been torn to shreds.
A dark cloud follows me every where I go.
The sun tries to sneak around the clouds, but they just can not get around them.
A tear drop falls from the lonely clouds eyes…
More wanted to come out, but they could not.
They stayed in like bottle emotions.

I look in the mirror and saw myself.
And wonder who would mourn my death if I died,
I think…
And think…
No one….
Devastation came over me
Realization shook me.
I wept bitterly .
I felt like maggots were eating away my flesh.
And I was being bury alive.
I was just being devoured completely.

Tears welled up in my eyes.
a rain drop dropped over my head.
It was like adding salt to an open wound.
The cloud hovered over me with a grin.
That made my heart sicken in my bosom.
I wanted to escape.
But I was trap.
I had refrain myself from screaming.
I new no one would hear them.
I choke down my miserable grief.

I look in the mirror and saw myself.
But there were two extra eyes.
The dark cloud begin to talk to me.
She said “ I understand the depth of your sorrow…
I know your profound grief.
But do not let this grief destroy your life.
Break down the walls around your heart.
Do not have a cold stony heart.
Stop torturing yourself with the wish to die.
And live your life. ”

Tears sprinkle down my face.
My soul was talking to me.
My emotions have been a great hindrance.
And I need to stop fighting with myself.
Before I am at the point of no return.

My question still remains is death the only way out?
I am not sure but I seal this letter with my blood, sweat, pain and tears....

[Bounce]

I really could not get into this drop, there were too many technical errors dealing with pressent tense terminology in this for me to ever get into it. I reread and tried to look past the gramatical mistakes, as we all make them, but when they are so key to the content and focus of the drop, you can not afford any. Structure worked fine here, the concept is one we all can relate too, but I just did not think you puled this off. Overall this was not a bad peice, just not very good in my mind, could and would have been much better minus the flaws. Then again who know's maybe Im just an idiot today... Thanks for you contribution to this forum keep them dropping...