stop
stop the sadness
stop the words
stop the madness
stop the pain
stop the yelling
stop the rain
stop the games
stop the fighting
stop calling me names
stop dis knife
stop the rusting
stop my life
stop the clock
stop the hands
stop the tick to da tock
stop time
stop me sumone
stop these broken rhymes
stop wat i learn
stop wat i want
stop wat i yearn
stop that thrown dart
stop my love
stop dis heart from tearing apart
Banned for 2 months for being a moron in poetic scriptures.
good pretty decent
nicccccce it wuz g0od
U oNlY c WuT i ChOsE tO sHoW bUt BeHiNd Ma SmIlE u JuZ dUn KnOe!
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people really need to learn how to give feedback.
this well was pretty self explanitory. its repetive, which puts strong focus on whats being said, it almost drills it into your head. one thing with this piece here, is you have to watch the line count, like the syables for each line, keep them even to each other, makes a smoother and easier read. also the rhyming seemed forced and you could pretty much guess what the next word was going to be, try to break out of that, longer and more detailed lines and stanzas will help.
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goood.......i liked it felt da emotion towards it
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Banned for 2 months for being a moron in poetic scriptures.
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