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    Drugs

    I want to write this here addictions
    to put the drug game in a chokehold
    dont put the belt around your arm be
    strong keep on taking your life and

    know that drugs are wrong there are no
    retakes started hooked being a victim
    what are you thinking its the same
    as suicide cause you know what your

    doing families lose it when they see
    the bruises will it be many more years
    to start your clueless from now on big
    time or small put a disclaimer on your

    blood vessel wall once you start thats
    all 45 thousand on dope right down from
    me is that to many get up in those rooms
    and speak quote me on this drugs misery

    cause you need them everyday to function
    if you have no dough you get nothing front
    when you got to pay unexpected bills due
    need cash sell your stuff for drugs that

    dont last stay off the trap know the facts
    you need it bad all I can say is dont start
    drugs it could be prison time you relapse
    drugs got ahold of you and its bad dont

    discount yourself I couldnt rap before now
    now I can my life is better dont got money
    I got text dont do drugs enough said

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    Re: Drugs

    That is exactly why I don't even try them... yay, weed, liquor, and a rare E. But yeah I'm struggling with the extra addiction factor too - like I have enough plights - why all the extra?
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    Re: Drugs

    I mean, great advice but your language is all over the place and choppy as hell. I wanted more from it when I got to the end still even though I get your message. What I wanted was more flow and cohesive language..I can tell you have the feeling and the knowledge to touch on a subject like this, but the writing itself is just really stop and go. You seem like you have your own unique way of writing but it also seems like you’re a little sporadic as well. I think you can get better and do better at this. Just keep writing and keep READING the work of good writers. Reading language and well strung together words is a form of learning to do so yourself in a way. I like your message and I dig your heart - but you have a lot of room to grow and improve as well! Keep going.

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