Bashing You Lames!

[thatdudeB]

I liked it. noticed the multis. good vocab. good flow. only thing I'd say is try to add more imagery/metaphors

[Letterman]

Thanks for the feed...uppin!

[The Gwapfather]

better than i expected, nice rhyme scheme and some good vocab used in there as well. multi syllable rhymes the only thing i could say is put some strong metaphors in there and/or try to incorporate more imagery.
not at all bad
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^Pretty much 100% what I was gonna say, was a cool piece though dude..

[El Heisenberg]

you listen to alot of immortal tech dont you? its like his style..
yet the rhyme seems incomplete.. reminds this of me somehow like it gets good then it stops.. not concept about this just a good ass written just how i like it..
flow was nice no line combating with each other because the syllables were consistent. vocab was pretty good to have such a good flow most of the time when people try to throw in longer words it stumbles their flow.. not here buddy.


great job jr.

[Letterman]

Uppin this throwback...

[Truth Iscariot]

This was dope.

[Letterman]

Lol thanks for the feed TI.