Hypnotistic vs. -Chrispy-

[Extortion]

Ten Lines
Due in 2 Hours
^From last check in
House Rules
This is my check
O' By the Way

King

Me

[-Chrispy-]

Check

[-Chrispy-]

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[Extortion]

I'll get at you some other time.. Kind of lookin' for someone new to the site cause I don't wanna lose due to dickriding votes. Just in case, for my first few battles.

He's scared of the bigger kids around, and just tried to front away
but he just couldnt get outta Lines quick enuff, even w/ a gun @ a bank.
sorry bout this being ur first battle in all, but ur career's done with
call it pwn coz ur sneaky at times, going through someone else's rummage
this pussy's been burnt many times, we should feel bad for Christy
chewed up and digested, just how the older men like it, extra Chrispy
his chances are slim, when i showed up i was guaranteed his loss
and the deal is he couldnt pull an upset, smacking a baby across
"

It's not who I am underneath, but what I do, that defines me."

i'm glad to see this punk's trying to define me, u should use a dictionary
coz im glad to see someone has interest, emotions, and likes to play pictionary*

*his sig has a removed/deleted image hosted by photobucket

/Robbery

Links:
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...821/index.html
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...086/index.html

[-Chrispy-]

*Al Pacino is his avi
**MK = Mortal Kombat in his sig
***Hyp = Hypnotiq

--

I’ll (start off light).. Give him a (hard knock life), I got a (heart of ice)
You can try hard ta fight but I’ll destroy ya motor; (car bomb, dyke!)

You ain’t a (sick rapper.) (In fact yer) a kid with some (shit banters)
My lines like “car accidents” cause I’m known to give (“hyp, fractures”)

This here’s a mismatch-herb! Ya got diarrhea lines, ya (drop softer)
Like a dysfunctional fam, no one here really cares ‘bout (Godfather)*

So, (Hyp is doomed!) I treat Refs like ‘Sheed Wallace, I’ll (rip his crew!)
It’s ironic…………. You reppin’ “MK” cause I’m ‘bout to (“finish you”!)**

Here’s a (lesson punk)
Ya step to me…. And you won’t breathe after; in(gestions stuffed)
Only time “Hyp” brought anything to the table? I was (gettin’ drunk!)***

[-Chrispy-]

Good to battle you, bro. Good luck.

[Malice]

Chrispy:
So, (Hyp is doomed!) I treat Refs like ‘Sheed Wallace, I’ll (rip his crew!)
It’s ironic…………. You reppin’ “MK” cause I’m ‘bout to (“finish you”!)**

Here’s a (lesson punk)
Ya step to me…. And you won’t breathe after; in(gestions stuffed)
Only time “Hyp” brought anything to the table? I was (gettin’ drunk!)***
^best lines
had 2 other decent ones

overall:
you are making your verse loook way to busy with all that symbol shit, we are smart enough to see your multis, in fact they actually looked incredibly forced half the time, you are trying to hard with multis, they are a nice touch and very effective if they seem natural, if you can make it fit great, if not dont bother

vs

Hypno:

He's scared of the bigger kids around, and just tried to front away
but he just couldnt get outta Lines quick enuff, even w/ a gun @ a bank.
^had high hopes for this, though something to do with a play on words with bullys at school in the lunch line or something and then just kinda ended somewhere else and only ok IMO

this pussy's been burnt many times, we should feel bad for Christy
chewed up and digested, just how the older men like it, extra Chrispy
extra chrispy would of been a great concept but i didnt like the way you went with it, would preferred a burned/BBQ wordplay for that, ok punch though

Overall:
not sure what happened this verse ive seen far better from you, iuno

Breakdown
didnt really like the technique chrispy used but he had some decent punches, hypno, not sure what happened again, just a real subpar verse for you..

v. Chrispy

[Malice]

Chrispy:
So, (Hyp is doomed!) I treat Refs like ‘Sheed Wallace, I’ll (rip his crew!)
It’s ironic…………. You reppin’ “MK” cause I’m ‘bout to (“finish you”!)**

Here’s a (lesson punk)
Ya step to me…. And you won’t breathe after; in(gestions stuffed)
Only time “Hyp” brought anything to the table? I was (gettin’ drunk!)***
^best lines
had 2 other decent ones

overall:
you are making your verse loook way to busy with all that symbol shit, we are smart enough to see your multis, in fact they actually looked incredibly forced half the time, you are trying to hard with multis, they are a nice touch and very effective if they seem natural, if you can make it fit great, if not dont bother

vs

Hypno:

He's scared of the bigger kids around, and just tried to front away
but he just couldnt get outta Lines quick enuff, even w/ a gun @ a bank.
^had high hopes for this, though something to do with a play on words with bullys at school in the lunch line or something and then just kinda ended somewhere else and only ok IMO

this pussy's been burnt many times, we should feel bad for Christy
chewed up and digested, just how the older men like it, extra Chrispy
extra chrispy would of been a great concept but i didnt like the way you went with it, would preferred a burned/BBQ wordplay for that, ok punch though

Overall:
not sure what happened this verse ive seen far better from you, iuno

Breakdown
didnt really like the technique chrispy used but he had some decent punches, hypno, not sure what happened again, just a real subpar verse for you..

v. Chrispy

[-Chrispy-]

Thanks for the vote.

[Ol' Wise]

Hypnotistic

Honestly nothing much to be highlighted. Seemed kinda force though, punches didn't really connect and had some played concepts. The very first line was the best line by far. The rest of the verse was filler. Could've used more thought for your verse.

Crispy

Decent verse, had the multis in affect. Your punches hit slightly harder with me and the whole verse was more direct. Just structure your verse better and you should keep elevating. Some lines that stood out:


Hear's a (Lesson Punk)
Ya step to me…. And you won’t breathe after; in(gestions stuffed)
Only time “Hyp” brought anything to the table? I was (gettin’ drunk!)***

v/ Crispy... for harder and more consistent punches, both keep elevating

[King]

nothing hyp, sorry.

vs

You ain’t a (sick rapper.) (In fact yer) a kid with some (shit banters)
My lines like “car accidents” cause I’m known to give (“hyp, fractures”)

Hyp I'm pretty sure I've seen you drop much better than this, it looks like you say this dude had never battled before and you got lazy. it happens, but always drop as good as you can, thats how you elevate as fast as possible.

Chrisp, I would have quoted your closer too if it was a play on calling him a waiter of something in that direction. The Hypnotiq play was kinda bland to me. Also, I would strongly suggest to not separate the bars, and lose the parentheses.

Vote Chripsy

[-Chrispy-]

Thanks for the vote and suggestion, King. But that's just the way I text. Hate it or love it.

[Prince S.Tana]

Here’s a (lesson punk)
Ya step to me…. And you won’t breathe after; in(gestions stuffed)
Only time “Hyp” brought anything to the table? I was (gettin’ drunk!)
So, (Hyp is doomed!) I treat Refs like ‘Sheed Wallace, I’ll (rip his crew!)
It’s ironic…………. You reppin’ “MK” cause I’m ‘bout to (“finish you”!)**

vs.

He's scared of the bigger kids around, and just tried to front away
but he just couldnt get outta Lines quick enuff, even w/ a gun @ a bank.
his chances are slim, when i showed up i was guaranteed his loss
and the deal is he couldnt pull an upset, smacking a baby across

the battle was pretty equal, some weak lines and some strong, i felt chrispy edged it out for the win for the stronger bars

[Hollow Cost]

He's scared of the bigger kids around, and just tried to front away
but he just couldnt get outta Lines quick enuff, even w/ a gun @ a bank.
^^ was alright, the only thing that rlly stood out to me

vz

So, (Hyp is doomed!) I treat Refs like ‘Sheed Wallace, I’ll (rip his crew!)
It’s ironic…………. You reppin’ “MK” cause I’m ‘bout to (“finish you”!)
^^ohk

Here’s a (lesson punk)
Ya step to me…. And you won’t breathe after; in(gestions stuffed)
Only time “Hyp” brought anything to the table? I was (gettin’ drunk!)***
^^ohk

not really much to say on this battle except i xpected more, but i think chrispy got it by a little bit, not a lot of hard hitting punches from either side. so crisp got it by one bar

no hate,

v/Chrispy