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I aint been around here for a few months....ive been away studying some uk hip hop lol, looking to go in a new direction with my music, bit more natural....anyways i just pretty much smashed this track out, mix isnt finished but whatever....feed me plz will rtf

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...22#post7624322

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...302/index.html

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[Big Question]

please?

[Big Question]

no?

[Big Question]

....

[Mr Salvdor]

ight its playin



beat is.. ight... i can dig it.. but cud be better


anyway.. verse starts


flow is coming of solid... its on point for the most part tbh
delivery cud be smoothed out

but the biggest thing. that gets me is the emotion and presence..,. it just seemed like 'eh fuck it'


like.. u cud of gave more if u know wut i mean.


hook wuz ight.. but seemed awkward but wuz ight


verse 2


flow wuz ight again but weaker... fell off a lot more... there were bars u really just fell off... had pauses in the end of bars and stretched words to try to make it fit.. really don't feel this verse

content is solid tho.. just the basics are lacking


hook - same thing


verse 3


same thing as verse 2... u fall off a lot at the end of bars... that just make it awkward and u stretch some words to try to make it fit... i just really didin't dig the scheme on this verse at all



hook - again same thoughts


holla pz - Sal

[EBCB]

listning... beat is banging... damn.. ... you come in...pretty good here.... your flow is getting better... lyrics is iight... hook is cool... some lines was were played.. like the braille line.. some others... but overall good track.

good job mate...

jolly good show.

keep it up.....