Smoka (1-0) vs. Nahlidge (1-0)

[Brandon Cee]

Rules and Regulations

Good Luck!

[Nahlidge]

Didn`t even know these shits was up lol.

[SmokaJoka]

ehh...what a pain, I didn't even sign back in yet...thanks for raping me back into SS Cee

if you don't mind the late check in I'll still drop something...or you can take a W, makes no difference to me

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...544/index.html
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...542/index.html
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...535/index.html
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...527/index.html
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...536/index.html
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...545/index.html
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...543/index.html

[Nahlidge]

Under The Bridge

I don`t ever wanna feel... Like I did that day
Take me to the place I love... Take me all the way

With heart on sleeve, my crooked tie still resembles a noosed neck
That I could barely fix straight... just imagine my loose ends
I try to mold reality out these lies that the truth bends
While payin` attention to you has got me nothin` but new debts
I can`t afford to pay off, I just watch as they build up
This table for 2 is half full with regrets, but we`re still "us"
Or so I like the still believe, cause the endin` is not clear
The illusion is beautiful, but you expect me to not stare?
Not as easy as it seems, still haven`t threaded the needle
It`s like tryna stitch together 2 halves that aren`t equal
So things taste more bitter, a little harder to digest
Sheddin` a part of what you left cause you thought it was for best
And I`ve bargained what I kept with hopes we could be "more"
But this natural high always lands every time we see shore
So toss the anchor, we`ll wait a day and set sail tomorrow
As I come to terms with your heart, the one I failed to borrow

I don`t ever wanna feel... Like I did that day
Take me to the place I love... Take me all the way

With heart on sleeve, I gave up matchin` my shirt with new pants
I would`ve poured my heart, if only you`d cup your 2 hands
Tired of the need to feel loved, cause the longer I sit waitin`
Is the more I grow numb, which isn`t part of the sensation
But I stuck around long enough, time to seek me a new end
While you try to take credit for ruinin` 2 friends
That could`ve been leaps more had you just opened your eyes
Instead you rained on my parade, plagued with gray and sore skies
But this umbrella ain`t big enough for the both of us
So watch me head for clear skies while you open up
This boat has roughed through storms but watch as the bow breaks
Cause you granted me the freedom I believe that I`ll now take
And sail that way with, feelin` alone is what I`ll happily be
Mainly because I`m tired of you sittin` in my passenger seat
Though the pain might sting at first, it`s just a part of what`s lost
Inflate your ego, stand tall, I hope this bridge is knockin` you off

I don`t ever wanna feel... Like I did that day
Take me to the place I love... Take me all the way

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[SmokaJoka]

Midnight Sunrise


My dreams have been getting worse lately...
At first I was just chasing a girl, and then I'd wake up...
But here recently, it's gotten a little crazy...
I finally catch up to her and I think everything's ok but...
When she turns to me, her face is hazy...

Something's wrong, I forgot the nightmare that seemed so clear
I jolt out of my sleep as if someone was screaming in my ear
The screams pour through my entire body, and I can't bear it
Within seconds I realize that I truly am going through terror
Gasping for air and clawing at the bed to try to find a way to pull myself up
Everything'll be ok if I get up, I begin straining with my eyes shut
Clenching the velvet red that I'm lying in, I pull with might...to no avail

This is like paralysis....I told myself

The power of emotion and thought, but unable to do anything about it
I start to struggle with my breath, and my mind is becoming clouded
I try to call for help, in hope that someone is near me in this predicament
Only a hiss and a whimper come out, oh man..I'm really in some shit
But wait!! a face is coming into view...and just as soon it grinned
His eyes glinting with joy, as he's watching me in amusement
Watching wickedly, he whispers that he has something to confess

This is for Mina....he says

I wish I could burst with laughter and respond with a simple 'who?'
Except....the laughing on this planet seems it's about to conclude
I've gotta fight this, I know I can get up, and in one last burst of energy
I feel a sick pain grip my heart in a way that could almost finish me
Too ignorant to ask for assistance from him, instead I look at him in rage
My scream gurgled as I struggled to move feeling like I'm trapped in a cage
Blood is filling my lungs...how ironic I choke on blood before I disappear

blood...which sustains life throughout the years...

The man's face begins to turn into a blur, and I'm not too stunned to see
This blur will become a ghost that will haunt me for the rest of eternity
I can feel the forever sleep coming on, one that I've feared since I was young
In one last move, I raise my head and look down my body...I'm done
It was then, as final drops of blood poured from my chest...
That the world would forever remember...Dracula is dead


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[2triple0]

okay i think this was a very entertaining battle for sure, because both writers came with topnotch material... Nahlidge wrote a piece entitled 'Under the Bridge' and there were so many reasons that i enjoyed that name... first of all, before i explain why i like the topic he chose i think it is important to say that people can relate to poetry at any time in history and individual people can speak to each other through the text...also people may write things in their poetry that others relate to in either the intended way or a different one. so with all that, i related to this piece in various ways. first because there was a friend of mine we called nikka that we used to make fun of because of his heroin addiction and how he used to go under the bridge (apparently the vocalist of red hot chili peppers also was talking about his drug addiction in Under the Bridge....i liked the fact that i thought of nikka also because of the mcee online that drops flows... there was a final reason i enjoyed the title of the piece and it is because i chill with a friend of mine at his house, and we used to get SUPERSTONED and listen to red hot chili peppers all the time... as for the text itself there were no real major faults that i noticed, and just a few simple things to point out, like the repeating chorus which set the eerie mood and the depressing vibes... you could argue that the piece was too depressing, but i really can't argue with a piece that i related to so intimately...

the second piece was a little less riveting for me... it reminded me of a verse i wrote a while back because of two reasons; in the introduction the narrator describes a woman he is having dreams about, and secondly at the ending there is a reference to Dracula being killed... this is exactly how one of my pieces that i wrote a while back begins and ends, i think you were exceptional with your wording and the flow was incredibly impressive... i think overall my vote has to go to Nahlidge even though Smoka came with a polished and well rounded verse... there were just a few points that I felt made Nahlidge take the cake this week and edge smoka for the win.... alright no hate

[SMZ]

nahlidge - good shit - i was gonna point out the table for two line, but then you had several more real nice lines that made the goodness cary thru the whole piece than just stand out in one place... good ish

smoka - ha, nice spin... i feel stupid, i really thought you were talking from the eyes of some chick thru the whole piece til you dropped the dracula line and the pic... good ish too

good match, but nah just words his phrases and lines better to me, the lines flow smoothly together, while smoka you've got more of a stacking feel... like you've stacked couplets together, etc

v/ nahlidge

[Brandon Cee]

Nahlidge wins (2-0)
Smoka loses (1-1) and signs out

CLOSED