Back to just rapping...

[Chris-Poth]

Yo, i be puttin it down for the mile high city...
My style is vile, and its wild so ride wit me...
Im auspicious, wasnt taught to talk vicious...
But ever since a tot, ive faught and sought riches...
Im sick wit it, full of shit and quick witted...
Loaded up a clip, and bitch, the Sig spit it...
I stay blazing, purple haze and play station...
Life is like a maze, it pays to stay patient...
Im just clever, is there someone i trust? Never...
So i aint tappin that ass unless i just met her...
This is hip hop, not another one of life's pit stops...
Sometimes to survive, you gotta open up the ziplock...
But leave it at that, if its weed in a bag...
Ya fine, but past that, you'll be needin rehab...
Ive seen it before, i did OC at the store...
Pretty soon, every day i was fiendin for more...
You start by poppin percocet or maybe a vicodin...
Pretty soon, you realize you really are likin it...
But OC aint cheap, and i aint got that dang change...
Oh well, guess what, heroin's the same thing...
Great, look Mom, your sons a heroin junky...
Even spittin this shit it gets embarassin, fuck me...
But im clean now, and lookin back i see how...
Much control i lost, im so glad im free now...
But fuck what just happened, im back to just rappin...
Perfecting my style, and fixing whats lackin...

[Chris-Poth]

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...518/index.html

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...543/index.html

[Godwasheeeeeeeeeeeeere]

i thought ur flow was viscious, i thought ur content was raw, the only real negative critique i could gice it is ur content was all over the place

and i seen what u said in cancers thread but yeah text is mad dif

some people may claim this is simple

bot props

[Godwasheeeeeeeeeeeeere]

i thought ur flow was viscious, i thought ur content was raw, the only real negative critique i could gice it is ur content was all over the place

and i seen what u said in cancers thread but yeah text is mad dif

some people may claim this is simple

bot props

[Chris-Poth]

I totally feel ya bro. I have the talent, but i havent dropped in so long. When i was writing this is was all over the place. But ya i try to do text as tho it was audio, flow has gotta be vicious

[yung nothing]

Really well written, as GOW said sometimes you jumped around a bit but it was a very well done piece over all I was particularly impessed with the flow.


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http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...260/index.html

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[RhythmAndPoetryF]

Yeah clearly nice flow and sylls. Lacks wordplay/themes and creativity/content

[Chris-Poth]

Anyone wanna gimme more then a sentence of feed?

[Mafioso.]

Im just clever, is there someone i trust? Never...
So i aint tappin that ass unless i just met her
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yo you defintly got potential...I feel the emotion and it was simple but yet it wasn't a boring read...you've been threw some shit and you can take those experince's and put em in great piece's but you need to get more creative think outside the box with ya shit get witty...read some hall of fame piece's and see what I'm saying and make it one stable concept so you can focus on that topic..overall not bad raw emotion but like said put ya experince's into witty shit and get creative and smooth with ya word ya shit on a more poetic level..and I know u an black been arguing but put that shit aside and come join us under elavation and we can help you elavate in many differen ways stay up good to know your cean god bless..~Mafioso.~

[Chris-Poth]

Im really writing this shit to start up audio anyways. Thats why everyone thinks its lacking creativity or whatever. Spit on a track the flow of this would be intense and the compound syllable rhymes hit hard. I feel ya though, i just think thats the way to elevate in topicals. Im trying to start audio. Any piece i put in the Open Mic section is gonna have shorter lines and be shit im writing to practice for audio

[Soule]

Flow is good, but the piece was too audio for me. If your gonna write a song, get a fucking mic and record it. If your gonna write a TOPICAL verse. Then this is the forum for you. Just like DJKingDavid, you don't listen to advise and the vets hate you because your a punk when we give it to you. The wording is below average, no good metaphores...freestyles? Try an actual storyline! Overall, the flow was the only decent thing in this entire piece. Keep elevating punk.

[Chris-Poth]

The flow? How about when i hit six syllable rhymes. And i know its an audio piece. Thats what it is. Im writing right now to keep my skill on point for when i get my audio equipt. So im not writing topicals, im writing songs. Sorry...

[Chris-Poth]

And vets dont like me? Uhh... You dont like me.