Sick Mindz Presents: Therapy (Swayde & Calli)

[Swayde]

Calli-Bold
Swayde-Reg font

This a world of shame were hope decays
And medical innsurance cant even cope with pain
Religious but dont know of grace
So i drown my fear in holywater, let em float away
Stuck in this broken state, seeking completion
Feeling defeated, my voice shrieking a seizure
Of unregulated air, instead of breathin I’m weezin
Strength is something I’m too weak to believe in
So 1000 arms couldnt equal the beatin
of this devine heathen, God ur people r bleedin
Sin is the Drug, ima Clean it - Soon As
I sneak into treatment, but the pessimist inside
Prevents therapeutic medicine from getting to the right
Part of me that needs to heal… regret lives in the signs
Of my depression every smile is a precipice of lies
which is to desguise this vessel of demise
That'll wrestle with the ties, that bound me to life
you gotta fight - Be aggresive as you DIE
When showing Love keep it nesstled deep inside
Sheltered from light by a large looming tree
A soothing breeze sings the… dirge the branches the eulogy
Cuz rain’s coming and the water breaks through the leaves
Back to square one this position isn’t new to me
No, Its Old...but chances i've needed 2 or 3
Ur missing the Purpose, speaking with Truent Speach
I've walked with "HE" to a spot that few will reach
to the depths of ur Mind
where even the shallow water lead to a view thats deep
Rebuking the pessimist cuz it’s the devil’s wish to feed
On my regrets and it’s too perilous to leave
Myself in this mess so it’s imperative to seek
A therapist, or heaven’s gift…whatever’s bringin peace...

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[Swayde]

uppin this yall

[2triple0]

this piece was amazing... thought there were a lot of crucial details for the topic, you guys really broke it all down there... i liked the idea of the pessimistic view, like you couldn't stop thinking there was always something wrong with yourself or your verse or whatever the reader understands you as referring to... i felt like both writers came real nice and every line pertained to the story... the topic was called therapy and i think that it was called that because these pessimistic people that you were talking about probably needed a therapist to talk to, because life had become to difficult to understand... that was really deep and relevant to the story...

i also liked how you split up your verses for i believe four lines a piece... Although it was more difficult to decipher who was who... it still didn't affect the flow of the rhyme, because both of your styles mixed very well...

[Swayde]

thanks for the feed uppin!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

[Swayde]

some feed on this please!!!!!!!!

[ZachLipscomb]

Great start you guys. I love the content , i can really feel the emotions in the lines. Keep spittin from the soul like that...we will be heard one day. They can't control the mainstream music forever

[Swayde]

thanx for the feed...uppin and yea...mainstream sucks...

[Godwasheeeeeeeeeeeeere]

this was dope as fuck, i almos didnt catch how u picked on each others ryhme scheme till i read it out loud tho, but once i did it was fuckin viscious

noce content, flow was insane

props on this,

Of unregulated air, instead of breathin I’m weezin
Strength is something I’m too weak to believe in
So 1000 arms couldnt equal the beatin
of this devine heathen, God ur people r bleedin

that was a dope as transition from one to the other and the content n ery thing was FIRE

props again

calli i wanna collab with you

[Rosetti Frost]

Nice shit here I liked how you fed off of each other...

this had to be written on AIM...

the flow was ill nasty on point...the content was fresh as fuck...

everything about this piece meshed very well...a nice collab indeed...

glad to see new faces here...

Swayde thanks for the feed on my drop...

[JayR_Elite]

First off I cant beleave your not signed! :O or are you?

Any way your first lines are amazing for instance....

This a world of shame were hope decays
And medical innsurance cant even cope with pain---Son this is amazing nuf said


Strength is something I’m too weak to believe in
So 1000 arms couldnt equal the beatin

-I especially liked this line the flow throughout the verse is on point and its worded to perfection

Sheltered from light by a large looming tree
A soothing breeze sings the… dirge the branches the eulogy
Cuz rain’s coming and the water breaks through the leaves
Back to square one this position isn’t new to me

-This is better than lil wayne man I can actually vision what your saying feel your lyrical pain.


Ur missing the Purpose, speaking with Truent Speach
I've walked with "HE" to a spot that few will reach
to the depths of ur Mind
where even the shallow water lead to a view thats deep

-I agree you have and i can see how deep your skillz have become bro
you have me thinking for real


Overall I may not be the best to critiuqe your writings but as far as my mind allows me i see two BEAST in those shallow waters...
Im new at first i thought it was one writer now that I know that its a collabaration its nice real nice!

[Swayde]

thnx man looks like we hit hard calli

[xPaperBoy]

SiCk MinDz in the building!

Dope read fellas.

[Swayde]

yea man lol uppin more feed on this

[Swayde]

uppin feeed

[Swayde]

more feed pleasse ?