You Really Want This?"Freestyle"(Im Bored)

[Kapital J]

Dont be a bitch Step up motha fucka
Stop workin from a distance like you undercova or sumthin
Words goin round that you like talkin shit
Im warnin you man im not da nigga to mess wit
You get it? Or do you need a demonstration?
If you really want beat that badly i can make reservations
To show you da tru meanin of devastation
Betta make renevations uprade ya stations
Im a one-man army bout to make my invasion
Ya crews used to me they be like "Excuse me.What kinda hell ya raisin?"
I be like "ima show you hatas total annihilation"
Right after i achieve my five-star rating
Smile at da camera like its a Kodak moment
Next thing ya know da whole shows explodin
Look down at ya corpse say to myself "I Told Him"
Shake my head and then make my way to da exit
Snarl at Jerry Springer say to him "Ya up next bitch"
Take a commercial break of course i aint done yet kid
You put up a better fight in my alternative ending
Laugh my fuckin ass off Not Even In Ya Dreams
Motha fucka run n duck wen my chopper squeeze
Im talkin bout dat ak47 if u aint already understand
I murded ya once before i dont need to kill anotha man
My fingers squeezin da 9 millimeter wit da clip in da otha hand
Spray shells spread out leave you stretched out like a rubberband
Ha nigga before we get dis shit started
After all dat i said DO YOU HONESTLY WANT THIS?

[Kapital J]

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...wn-395315.html

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...em-395534.html

[Kapital J]

uppin

[Naturalinstinct]

That was pretty good, i didnt really dig the rhyme scheme at the end but i still like the effort.

[Ink Poyzin]

This wasn't like the other pieces I read by you. I just wasn't feeling it, bro... It had nothing quotable in it. And the gangster shit.. It made the piece dead. The rhyme scheme was simple. So was the vocab. I ain't trying to sound like a prick or nothin'. Just being real with ya, bro. This piece.. It's all been said before. I guess thanks for the read. And keep writing.

[Naturalinstinct]

honourable i could deal with real.

[Treazun]

Alright, good but not as good as ur others, still tho, as the other guy said, an effort. some of the rhymes were creative thats a big plus