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    Alone

    You know the feeling when...
    When you really need it, but you just can‘t get it
    A dart to your heart leaves a love mark and you can‘t forget it,
    Trying my best to understand the beating of my heart trying to love her,
    Can‘t concentrate on what i‘m thinking, my mind starts to suffer,
    Harmony, everbody around me, is doing their simple thing,
    Everbody is tickling eachothers lips; it‘s spring,
    Walking down the streets listening to the birds sing,
    Feeling so alone, stupid memories of past mistakes,
    Starting to panic can‘t find the button for the brakes,
    Can‘t stop it cause my heart shakes,
    The panic turns to anger and i‘m hating my friends that are fakes,
    Hating everthing everbody that I used to love,
    Tried my best but it just wasn‘t enough,
    People say your young, but I don‘t care,
    Walked a long road and it only lead to a nightmare,
    Was searching for love, but all I got was some lonelyness
    I used to diss everygirl that liked me and I didn‘t know it,
    Just because these girls were smart and they never show it,
    And the angel that is inside me, turned in to a devil,
    Just because I feel evil cause i‘m alone and the world looks so lonely
    Alone, but somehow not on my own,
    Alone, and mind young and not grown,
    Must find myself before lonelyness turns me to stone
    People giving me advice, their trying to be nice,
    But their not helping, their just preteding,
    Their just birning more paranoya and it‘s not ending,
    Didn‘t climb up the mountain, but i really want to see the view,
    Cause I really want to have somebody to love but what to do,
    Drop my last tear drop, trying make my last fear stop,
    I wont let this big bad world just eat me,
    Remember me for the last seconds and delete me


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    Re: Alone

    bump

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    Re: Alone

    You know the feeling when...
    When you really need it, but you just can‘t get it
    A dart to your heart leaves a love mark and you can‘t forget it,
    Trying my best to understand the beating of my heart trying to love her,
    Can‘t concentrate on what i‘m thinking, my mind starts to suffer,
    Harmony, everbody around me, is doing their simple thing,
    Everbody is tickling eachothers lips; it‘s spring,





    These lines were cool and I really liked how in the beggining of thi spiece you kinda got off to a start that made it seem like the whole piece was kinda gonna be really upbeat like this type of ode or ballad.
    I like how the first half of this piece and the second half kinda contrast each other.


    Nice piece.

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    Re: Alone

    Man thanks man, I appreciate that very much

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