cool piece bro. I think the word fun is best to describe this one. I think you used some nice imagination and it reminded me of somethin out of Pan's Labyrinth. I think it could have used a little bit more detailed description but I think that it would make the verse a million times longer so I don't know about that. either way, cool little adventure here for the wondrous mind.
peACE
Stock.....nice little OM here....the picture does fit the story rather nicely indeed....the imagery that you showed throughout the piece was consistent enough and the concept was nice....I thought the flow might of been a little choppy in a couple of spots but it didnt make too much of a difference...The closer for the piece was a good choice too I think....Overall this was an enjoyable read...keep em comin man.....Peace...
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Wow this was a nice piece. i loved the pace you had going. the begginning really had great imagery and then you began to describe the girl's adventure through the woods and the imagery just stayed with it. really a nice read. i could feel the emotion the girl had towards her days in the woods really liked the fairytale factor and a little girl's imagination thought that was clever. the flow was on point and i liked how you had the sorta hook part which was a nice add on. overall nice peice really enjoyed reading it stock. keep writing bro.
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