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[Notebook]

Follow the Theory...

These misfortunes are portions of many cautions that God's forcin
with potions and spells mystically focus on stars floatin//

explosions are boastin so stars falling with counterfit wishes
dropping in oceans, creating motion, disrupting the fishes//

scatters the species until diversity enters the balance
anger will sink in destruction, panic will center in talent//

leading back to the topic, your optics adjusting the message
fortunes will twist for the worse, and burst into maximum wreckage//

[PIMA]

rhymes scheme is there
alotta of this shit is either abstract practice or you forced a flow to sound dope with the multis
not much being said its like you try and stretch out what your saying to extend its importance when itz just getting a thinner and thinner spread of what is really being said

keep it short sweet and dope with the topic creating the rhyme structure not the other way arounf

[Notebook]

thanks for the feed man but i think your confused right now...

i had no intention to extend it...everything youve read connects to the main topic which is Misfortunes...try focusing on the message being told...

no disrespect man...

[PIMA]

look at homie whose wordplay imagery is all sloppy telling me to focus

you need to convey your perspective more vivid

[Notebook]

lol w/e beef lover...

uppin...

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