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    Rap 101

    Homie, don't bother this fatherless child
    Niggaz wit problems get shot in the eusophagus, set off the apocolypse now
    the projectiles choppin' you down
    cock it and blaaw
    robbin' you for every profit in ya pocket and smile
    My cannon dismantle you, let it off like roman candles
    point two nines at you with bandana's on the handles
    blast through ya flannels
    we just Sopranos smashin' in astro vans with ammo stashed in the panels
    we animals when it's drama
    move like mechanical anaconda's, we hannibals, cannibals, and piranha's
    the last nigga with info that hand over the fed's
    the homie's jumped in the hummer, ran over his head
    hand over your bread
    we snatch you out your land rover, choke ya
    smoke ya while we stand over your bed
    just to let ya know, this is westcoasonostra
    ever since Pac passed you thought the westcoast was over
    but look closer and you're liable to find
    My homicidal recitals' the kind that inspires a guy to rewind
    king of survival, the title is mine
    I write for ya spine and stifle ya mind with a cycle of triflin' rhymes
    It ain't a gangsta that us hustlaz won't reach
    we bust just to touch the cold streets
    you bustas won't cease
    and that's why my next tattoo will say "no justice, no peace..."
    plus "fuck the police"


    Nigga, I wish you would speak on my label
    I'll walk in your house, put my feet on your table, see what's on cable
    soon as you speak, shots leave you leakin' from navel
    rock you to sleep in a cradle, you geeks weak and unable
    we can disable haters from Tennessee to Diego
    Long Beach to Vallejo
    law low, a yo, we givin' niggaz wings and a halo
    squeezin' them thangs so easily without seein' a reason to say no
    they ask, "why ya by yourself?"
    cuz I walked into the firearm store, tried to buy the entire shelf
    to jackers out to acquire wealth
    I fire shells, while ya yell, I serve ya like the hired help
    My science are sins, my mind tire within
    the bad guy wins like the giant got goliath's revenge
    puttin' 5 in ya benz, tie up ya wife in it then
    quiet your friends with gunfire as maniacal rhyme sire begins to strike like
    a viper and snipe ya again
    you can recite what'cha like but ya fight for ya life cuz the "I" can ignite
    the mic and he's slightly tighter than you when he write with the pen
    who's rivalin' him?

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    damn this was dope, again...

    .................................................. .......................................
    Niggaz wit problems get shot in the eusophagus,
    set off the apocolypse now
    the projectiles choppin' you down
    cock it and blaaw
    robbin' you for every profit in ya pocket and smile
    My cannon dismantle you, let it off like roman candles
    point two nines at you with bandana's on the handles
    blast through ya flannels
    we just Sopranos smashin' in astro vans
    with ammo stashed in the panels
    we animals when it's drama
    move like mechanical anaconda's, we hannibals, cannibals,
    .................................................. ......................................

    ^what i thought made this piece the dopest...

    overall you had nice multis. the flow was smooth.
    its just the word "nigga" used so much. not that
    it was really said "too much". still i just want you to
    know it'd sound just as dope without using it.
    if its your style though... keep it.. ill still check out
    your pieces.. have a good one, man.. and the read
    was amazing so thanks.

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    Re: Rap 101

    Much love for the feed, keep it comin ppls

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    Re: Rap 101

    uppin for more feed

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    Yo, this was ILL, bro.. The flow was smooth and was
    supported with all sorts of shit.. The multis, metaphors
    and vocab... Just a great shuttle approach. Keep the
    ILL flows flowin', bro... Welcome to the site and I help
    you enjoy it here..

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    Re: Rap 101

    Lookin to get some mo feed
    Hit it up

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    Re: Rap 101

    uppin for feed

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    Re: Rap 101

    i liked the flow, vocab was good, i can tell u was feelin it when u were writing it. 1 thing...i wanna see u write on a specific topic because alotta people aint feelin the scattered hood story rap as much but your flow and your wording made up for that. overall i felt it tho ima check for some more of ya stuff and u check for mines
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    Re: Rap 101

    wass wood BL?
    Always Impervious an Axis Power.


    Supermod Me.

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    Re: Rap 101

    RiZe,
    word.. nice flow.. this sounds like it'd be
    great on audio.. alot of ILL shit.. vocabulary
    was on point... no major errors or bad wording
    that would throw me off. all in all.. good job, man..
    you definitely got skill.. keep writin'.. -un0
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    daamn i really wanna hear this shit fuk readin it..the whole first verse i enjoyed ,,but realtalk on the last verse you was fallin off jus a lil bit but the vocab.the structure, i can tell you put ya heart on that shit
    we animals when its drama,move like mechanical anacondas
    my favorite shit , i just moved out the hood..you make me not regret that keep writing...
    BET YOU CANT FIGURE OUT WHO I AM BIIITCHEEZ

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    Re: Rap 101

    First thing...i know mostly this is a forum full of fictitious material but when it comes to ghetto its just so played and it also loses credit since most people who post gangsta verses arnt really gangsta. I dont imagine bad ass thugs keying shit down on the internet.

    Aside from that the mechanics were excellent. The flow was "dope" up untill the end where it seems like you got tired. Metaphors, multis, internals and rhyme scheme. FLow, and flow again. I dont know if you were just showing off or teaching heads how to do it coz the content didnt really match the verse. Except that i dont like the "gangsta fanatsy" verses i think this was hot.

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    Re: Rap 101

    thanks for the feed much love

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    nice piece really liked it
    It ain't a gangsta that us hustlaz won't reach
    we bust just to touch the cold streets
    you bustas won't cease
    and that's why my next tattoo will say "no justice, no peace..."
    plus "fuck the police"
    nice part one of my favorites

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    Re: Rap 101

    Thanks for all tha love pplz

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