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    Illusions of a Shape-Shifter.

    I don't want to make another thread.. so im just going to add a new poem here. Of course, i'll be getting links.

    A song in flames.

    I despise when people ask me her name.

    her tune is the same as mine,
    and my fingers move to the same beat.
    But we're still strangers;
    our hearts just have the same rhythm
    and we sway to the same song.

    We're twins in poetry.

    Together we laugh, together we cry.
    And together we play the same song.

    We're together in a shadow box.
    I'm her voice
    and she's my fingers;
    and together we're make believe beauty,
    a sky of make believe stars.

    But until the skies fall again
    we'll play these maddening songs
    and shove ourselves to the brink of crucifixion

    me with a bullet
    And her with a matchstick box.

    They ask me her name;
    everything has a name.
    but we're still strangers,
    and she's never told me hers,
    and I haven't bothered to ask.

    We just play together
    and go up in flames.
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    Re: Illusions of a Shape-Shifter.

    rise

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    Re: Illusions of a Shape-Shifter.

    this is now on my soundclick. Go look, leave feed please.

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    Re: Illusions of a Shape-Shifter.

    I know I'm probably COMPLETELY off base, but for some strange reason or another, this sort of reminded me of a metaphorical relationship shared between a bullet and a gun! I don't know why, it just did. Anyway, I thought this piece was great. As far as length and technique goes, well, it was short and simple. But in regard to depth and meaning it seemed very complex. I like the way you write, it really draws the reader/listener in. And I'm a huge fan of metaphors and this piece was littered with them. Your an interesting cat, very animated in the tone...and your word choice is impeccable. I enjoyed reading this. Good stuff! Yes, sir, good stuff indeed!



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    But until the skies fall again
    we'll play these maddening songs
    and shove ourselves to the brink of crucifixion

    me with a bullet
    And her with a matchstick box.
    Ingenious!



    Pz

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    Re: Illusions of a Shape-Shifter.

    Thanks for the feed. And I'll just leave your thoughts up for interpetation!

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