Week 10 - Lambragini (1 - 0) Vs yung ghost (1 - 2)

[D.Silver]

LLL JR Rules

Check in - due Wednesday, 11:59 PM Eastern Time.
Verses - due Friday, 11:59 PM Eastern Time.
Voting - ends Sunday, 11:59 PM Eastern Time.
Min. 5 Voting links are required.

Missing/No voting links
If you win the battle=no win added to your tally.
If you lose the battle=2 loses

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Legislation.G
If in your battle you are not up by more then 2 votes when the battle is closed, the Deduction of votes for posting less then the min 5 links, will come into effect.

Meaning if the votes deducted results in a lost for you, it will be Permanently Recorded.

Lines
Minimum 10 - Max 30
Match whoever drops first.

No Feeding, biting, recycling, bitching, or swaying

No Pics, unless agreed upon.

No Editing of your verse.

If you break any rules, you will be dealt with. Punishments will vary from each situation, so you could either get votes deducted from your battle or get booted from the

League.

Good Luck to you both

[Lambragini]

wow first ghost face now young ghost lol

anyway good luck and check

[Nashvillain]

lol check,good luck

[Lambragini]

ive got plenty to say N' you throw punchs but thier always foul
N' if ya reputation is on the line..youd be wacker than you are now
dude you a youngin N' i'll still break ya hips N' ya back
cuz thiers over 150 ways to be a rap artist N' you still came out wack
im sorry bro but for you to win you just have no fuckin hope
and dude plays hard to get..s' only so he dont have to battle someone dope
i no punchs like these are played but ya shit is just a blurr
^^N' dudes seen more pussy than all of us..cuz he just looks in the mirror
im holly son your just a faggot with no rod
cuz 'life' is a bitch..<---so i guess that makes you god
actin tough dude, faggot i'll just put you in ya place
cuz you gettin 'feedback'..cuz were just scared to see ya face

i keyed this quick


12.

[Nashvillain]

ghosts got this in the bag,wat makes you think ur gonna win dude
y drop more than 10..thats just more of ur shit they have to skim thru
dude claims he drops hard..never seen it so i dont belive ya
weak punches,an ur structures more fucked up than the leaning tower of pisa
dont get it twisted lams on his grind,he balls till he falls
no money involved,after every loss,till he cant feel his eyes at all
you have no chance,lam was hoping i no-showed,prolly sat there and timed it
stupid fuck..im not talkin bout a certain vet when i say your feeble minded
he's got a couple played lines,well ima be honest,ur whole verse is play to
lam always got a bitch on his side,cuz females tend 2 stick up 4 the gay dude
dont play it off like ur a vet,cause the whole league know your shit
i set the bar,but 2 bad his fat ass couldnt pull himself up over it

[Lambragini]

good job uppin for votes

[one way]

ive got plenty to say N' you throw punchs but thier always foul
N' if ya reputation is on the line..youd be wacker than you are now
na, concept is weak, your more or less stating something, no clever stuff or reall punch
dude you a youngin N' i'll still break ya hips N' ya back
cuz thiers over 150 ways to be a rap artist N' you still came out wack
na, weak all together
im sorry bro but for you to win you just have no fuckin hope
and dude plays hard to get..s' only so he dont have to battle someone dope
weak delivery, concept isn't too deep or clever either
i no punchs like these are played but ya shit is just a blurr
^^N' dudes seen more pussy than all of us..cuz he just looks in the mirror
weak, beef up your shit
im holly son your just a faggot with no rod
cuz life is a bitch..<---so i guess that makes you god
no, dont eve get it
actin tough dude, faggot i'll just put you in ya place
cuz you gettin 'feedback'..cuz were just scared to see ya face
na




ghosts got this in the bag,wat makes you think ur gonna win dude
y drop more than 10..thats just more of ur shit they have to skim thru
weak, played concept too
dude claims he drops hard..never seen it so i dont belive ya
weak punches,an ur structures more fucked up than the leaning tower of pisa
talking about his strucyture with a stretched line
dont get it twisted lams on his grind,he balls till he falls
no money involved,after every loss,till he cant feel his eyes at all
not even a punch, just rhyming randomly
you have no chance,lam was hoping i no-showed,prolly sat there and timed it
stupid fuck..im not talkin bout a certain vet when i say your feeble minded
weak
he's got a couple played lines,well ima be honest,ur whole verse is play to
lam always got a bitch on his side,cuz females tend 2 stick up 4 the gay dude
gay punches are lame and really overplayed
dont play it off like ur a vet,cause the whole league know your shit
i set the bar,but 2 bad his fat ass couldnt pull himself up over it
concept is okish but wording is bad


vote young ghost just barely.

[Lambragini]

^lol get real

1-0 uppin

[Nashvillain]

let ppl vote and dont hate,and it would be 0-1 for u

[Tebo]

ive got plenty to say N' you throw punchs but thier always foul
N' if ya reputation is on the line..youd be wacker than you are now
It's ok, not really sparking interest though, try to make your style making this punch more fresh
dude you a youngin N' i'll still break ya hips N' ya back
cuz thiers over 150 ways to be a rap artist N' you still came out wack
not feelings, I mean none of us will be sucessfull rap artists, work more real concepts not just random out disses
im sorry bro but for you to win you just have no fuckin hope
and dude plays hard to get..s' only so he dont have to battle someone dope
[b]this was ok, not bad, needs wording & watch length.
i no punchs like these are played but ya shit is just a blurr
^^N' dudes seen more pussy than all of us..cuz he just looks in the mirror
like you said played, why did you play yourself? did you think saying it's played going to make it less played, it just means we know you know you used a played line & used it anyways
im holly son your just a faggot with no rod
cuz 'life' is a bitch..<---so i guess that makes you god
no, this concept & thing wouldnt ever hit how i see it.
actin tough dude, faggot i'll just put you in ya place
cuz you gettin 'feedback'..cuz were just scared to see ya face
kinda, decent

Vsssssss

ghosts got this in the bag,wat makes you think ur gonna win dude
y drop more than 10..thats just more of ur shit they have to skim thru
not bad
dude claims he drops hard..never seen it so i dont belive ya
weak punches,an ur structures more fucked up than the leaning tower of pisaplayed
dont get it twisted lams on his grind,he balls till he falls
no money involved,after every loss,till he cant feel his eyes at all
decent, kinda played, your gettin the hang tho
you have no chance,lam was hoping i no-showed,prolly sat there and timed it
stupid fuck..im not talkin bout a certain vet when i say your feeble minded
first line & bottom didnt connect, work on that
he's got a couple played lines,well ima be honest,ur whole verse is play to
lam always got a bitch on his side,cuz females tend 2 stick up 4 the gay dude
played, 1 of the origional punches ever probly lol, oh well
dont play it off like ur a vet,cause the whole league know your shit
i set the bar,but 2 bad his fat ass couldnt pull himself up over it
platyed played played

Ok Young needs to work on more origional concepts, rhymein a bit better & you'll do good.

Lam you need work on all of the above, you came bit more origional but not as well.

V// Yung

[Nashvillain]

is dude even in LLL jr.???

[kid sick']

ive got plenty to say N' you throw punchs but thier always foul
N' if ya reputation is on the line..youd be wacker than you are now
meh
dude you a youngin N' i'll still break ya hips N' ya back
cuz thiers over 150 ways to be a rap artist N' you still came out wack
no..
im sorry bro but for you to win you just have no fuckin hope
and dude plays hard to get..s' only so he dont have to battle someone dope
ok...
i no punchs like these are played but ya shit is just a blurr
^^N' dudes seen more pussy than all of us..cuz he just looks in the mirror
this has been used plenty of times, no
im holly son your just a faggot with no rod
cuz life is a bitch..<---so i guess that makes you god
meh
actin tough dude, faggot i'll just put you in ya place
cuz you gettin 'feedback'..cuz were just scared to see ya face
no


Ok a lot of your lines have been used plenty of times, try to come more original. Also the lines that had a decent concept where worded very poorly. Try to add more wit to your lines, and read it before you drop, there should be no rush in your verse.


vs



ghosts got this in the bag,wat makes you think ur gonna win dude
y drop more than 10..thats just more of ur shit they have to skim thru
na
dude claims he drops hard..never seen it so i dont belive ya
weak punches,an ur structures more fucked up than the leaning tower of pisa
not hard at all
dont get it twisted lams on his grind,he balls till he falls
no money involved,after every loss,till he cant feel his eyes at all
wtf
you have no chance,lam was hoping i no-showed,prolly sat there and timed it
stupid fuck..im not talkin bout a certain vet when i say your feeble minded
ok
he's got a couple played lines,well ima be honest,ur whole verse is play to
lam always got a bitch on his side,cuz females tend 2 stick up 4 the gay dude
decent
dont play it off like ur a vet,cause the whole league know your shit
i set the bar,but 2 bad his fat ass couldnt pull himself up over it
no

You had a couple of ok lines but some of yours where played as well. (the bar line, the stretched line) Even though I don't really like to say "played" becuase if I like it, I like it, like some people would say your bitch line was played. I happend to like it na mean? Blah..


Anyway yung ghost gets my vote becuase he had better lines and had a better verse. Both of you work on your concepts and wording and you should be good.

v/Ghost

<---- Voter of the week

[Constance]

im sorry bro but for you to win you just have no fuckin hope
and dude plays hard to get..s' only so he dont have to battle someone dope

-v-

ghosts got this in the bag,wat makes you think ur gonna win dude
y drop more than 10..thats just more of ur shit they have to skim thru
he's got a couple played lines,well ima be honest,ur whole verse is play to
lam always got a bitch on his side,cuz females tend 2 stick up 4 the gay dude

above are okay and better lines but both need to work on coming anlot fresher that was your main problem in both verses, then you need to sort out your wording/structure, but overall ghost verse was just more consistant with okay punches.

v/ghost

[Donald Trump]

ghosts got this in the bag,wat makes you think ur gonna win dude
y drop more than 10..thats just more of ur shit they have to skim thru
he's got a couple played lines,well ima be honest,ur whole verse is play to
lam always got a bitch on his side,cuz females tend 2 stick up 4 the gay dude

vs

Nada

v-Ghost

[Dilate.]

ive got plenty to say N' you throw punchs but thier always foul
N' if ya reputation is on the line..youd be wacker than you are now
meh
dude you a youngin N' i'll still break ya hips N' ya back
cuz thiers over 150 ways to be a rap artist N' you still came out wack
nop
im sorry bro but for you to win you just have no fuckin hope
and dude plays hard to get..s' only so he dont have to battle someone dope
no stretched too
i no punchs like these are played but ya shit is just a blurr
^^N' dudes seen more pussy than all of us..cuz he just looks in the mirror
no man. n u sed ur punches are played makes it worse
im holly son your just a faggot with no rod
cuz 'life' is a bitch..<---so i guess that makes you god
no
actin tough dude, faggot i'll just put you in ya place
cuz you gettin 'feedback'..cuz were just scared to see ya face
no

u did okay ur structure was okay and flowed well. u used sum multis which was good but the main think which was the punches was where u lacked. alot of played shit like u even said in ur verse and no real hard hitters. keep improving though..

ghosts got this in the bag,wat makes you think ur gonna win dude
y drop more than 10..thats just more of ur shit they have to skim thru
played but meh.
dude claims he drops hard..never seen it so i dont belive ya
weak punches,an ur structures more fucked up than the leaning tower of pisa
noooo
dont get it twisted lams on his grind,he balls till he falls
no money involved,after every loss,till he cant feel his eyes at all
nop
you have no chance,lam was hoping i no-showed,prolly sat there and timed it
stupid fuck..im not talkin bout a certain vet when i say your feeble minded
nah played as fuk
he's got a couple played lines,well ima be honest,ur whole verse is play to
lam always got a bitch on his side,cuz females tend 2 stick up 4 the gay dude
k
dont play it off like ur a vet,cause the whole league know your shit
i set the bar,but 2 bad his fat ass couldnt pull himself up over it
no

same thing with u. ur structure needs to be shaped better and ur punches need more work but u came harder with one better bar so vote goes to u friend.

v/yung