Week 9 - Licorice (3 - 2) Vs Abbadon (1 - 0)

[D.Silver]

LLL JR Rules

Check in - due Wednesday, 11:59 PM Eastern Time.
Verses - due Friday, 11:59 PM Eastern Time.
Voting - ends Sunday, 11:59 PM Eastern Time.
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If you win the battle=no win added to your tally.
If you lose the battle=2 loses

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Legislation.G
If in your battle you are not up by more then 2 votes when the battle is closed, the Deduction of votes for posting less then the min 5 links, will come into effect. Meaning if the votes deducted results in a lost for you, it will be Permanently Recorded.

Lines
Minimum 10 - Max 30
Match whoever drops first.

No Feeding, biting, recycling, bitching, or swaying

No Pics, unless agreed upon.

No Editing of your verse.

If you break any rules, you will be dealt with. Punishments will vary from each situation, so you could either get votes deducted from your battle or get booted from the League.

Good Luck to you both

[Taz™]

check

[The Vortex]

cheek

[The Vortex]

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Hot rocking like afghani hash, bitch u’re next to b cremated
I’m unfuckable in this rap shit; u’ll b left textually frustrated
u can “act tough” but trust me kid u’ll never equal Chuck Norris
Lic’s Wit -less, so ill win mo’ nomination awards than Forest
ill cause soreness to this whorish excuse for a rapper
ur odds of victory are so short, u shudda bought a ladder
ima black adder stinging ur bladder with mad toxic lyrics
since u’ve already Lost your Soul, ill crush the rest of ur spirits
I can handle my liquor, but liquor look punch-drunk after my hits
ur a baby MC… u probably still sucking ya moms dry tits.
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[Taz™]

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Usually I got no time for this, I’d beckon to whore you & twist ur head
Guess u can call it lucky kid.......that I got a second for u in this thread
Free win, U w/ good in-sights so this punch will help u carry on dreamin
Ur birth might be celebrated like Jesus,
........................................tho dad’s still a mystery from those 3 men
Ur verse ends. fool-stop! We don’t need to talk abt. how wack u luk pup
Lines alone prove ur brain dead, I know cuz ur nose is also my hook up!
Ur punches arnt given land, like feudal to vassals, but from all the hassle
Got to admit Abb is king of the street.......since a mans home is his castle
I’ll hand u a loss pal W/ beef that gets into u, if not then the sauce shall
& seems Ab stuck on PMs-I shoved him so deep in-box ud think he’s social
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10.

[-Coop-]

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Abbadon
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Hot rocking like afghani hash, bitch u’re next to b cremated
I’m unfuckable in this rap shit; u’ll b left textually frustrated
Nothing but a threat, and not a very good one either. 0.5/2
u can “act tough” but trust me kid u’ll never equal Chuck Norris
Lic’s Wit -less, so ill win mo’ nomination awards than Forest
You were BARELY dissing him in this bar, cuz you had more self-glory. 0.5/2
ill cause soreness to this whorish excuse for a rapper
ur odds of victory are so short, u shudda bought a ladder
Concept is close to played, and it could've been used better. 1/2
ima black adder stinging ur bladder with mad toxic lyrics
since u’ve already Lost your Soul, ill crush the rest of ur spirits
This was decent to me... decent. 1.5/2
I can handle my liquor, but liquor look punch-drunk after my hits
ur a baby MC… u probably still sucking ya moms dry tits.
Played aint even the word... this was weak. 0.5/2

- 4/10 - Damn... you had one decent bar, one mediocre one, and the rest were garbage. It seemed like you were too focused on rhyming, because you weren't really hitting Licorice hard.

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Licorice
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Usually I got no time for this, I’d beckon to whore you & twist ur head
Guess u can call it lucky kid.......that I got a second for u in this thread
The periods were unnecessary, this was more self-glory than anything. 0.5/2
Free win, U w/ good in-sights so this punch will help u carry on dreamin
Ur birth might be celebrated like Jesus,
........................................tho dad’s still a mystery from those 3 men
Ok. I get what you're trying to say, even though this is stretched and worded poorly. 1/2
Ur verse ends. fool-stop! We don’t need to talk abt. how wack u luk pup
Lines alone prove ur brain dead, I know cuz ur nose is also my hook up!
Wow @ all the misspelled words. That's confusing. As a matter of fact, this whole bar was confusing... and weak. 0.5/2
Ur punches arnt given land, like feudal to vassals, but from all the hassle
Got to admit Abb is king of the street.......since a mans home is his castle
This was great. Finally... I liked this. 2/2
I’ll hand u a loss pal W/ beef that gets into u, if not then the sauce shall
& seems Ab stuck on PMs-I shoved him so deep in-box ud think he’s social
This was pretty forced. 1/2

- 5/10 - Damn @ your wording messing up the impact of your bars. The king of the street was a good punch, it was definitely the POTB. The mystery men had potential, it was just so stretched. Everything elses was kinda blah. This battle wasn't that impressive, but the victory goes to...

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VOTE: LICORICE
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[Tebo]

Nothing much

Vs

Ur punches arnt given land, like feudal to vassals, but from all the hassle
Got to admit Abb is king of the street.......since a mans home is his castle

That line won whole battle to me, V//Lic

[Donald Trump]

Hot rocking like afghani hash, bitch u’re next to b cremated
I’m unfuckable in this rap shit; u’ll b left textually frustrated
nah weak
u can “act tough” but trust me kid u’ll never equal Chuck Norris
Lic’s Wit -less, so ill win mo’ nomination awards than Forest
not feeling this
ill cause soreness to this whorish excuse for a rapper
ur odds of victory are so short, u shudda bought a ladder
nah weak
ima black adder stinging ur bladder with mad toxic lyrics
since u’ve already Lost your Soul, ill crush the rest of ur spirits
lol cool
I can handle my liquor, but liquor look punch-drunk after my hits
ur a baby MC… u probably still sucking ya moms dry tits.
weak

vs

Usually I got no time for this, I’d beckon to whore you & twist ur head
Guess u can call it lucky kid.......that I got a second for u in this thread
meh weak
Free win, U w/ good in-sights so this punch will help u carry on dreamin
Ur birth might be celebrated like Jesus,
........................................tho dad’s still a mystery from those 3 men
lol weak though
Ur verse ends. fool-stop! We don’t need to talk abt. how wack u luk pup
Lines alone prove ur brain dead, I know cuz ur nose is also my hook up!
cool
Ur punches arnt given land, like feudal to vassals, but from all the hassle
Got to admit Abb is king of the street.......since a mans home is his castle
okey
I’ll hand u a loss pal W/ beef that gets into u, if not then the sauce shall
& seems Ab stuck on PMs-I shoved him so deep in-box ud think he’s social
cool

v-Licorice

[JDoe]

Hot rocking like afghani hash, bitch u’re next to b cremated
I’m unfuckable in this rap shit; u’ll b left textually frustrated
meh.
u can “act tough” but trust me kid u’ll never equal Chuck Norris
Lic’s Wit -less, so ill win mo’ nomination awards than Forest
ok.
ill cause soreness to this whorish excuse for a rapper
ur odds of victory are so short, u shudda bought a ladder
ok.
ima black adder stinging ur bladder with mad toxic lyrics
since u’ve already Lost your Soul, ill crush the rest of ur spirits
good.
I can handle my liquor, but liquor look punch-drunk after my hits
ur a baby MC… u probably still sucking ya moms dry tits.
meh finisher.
1

vs.

Usually I got no time for this, I’d beckon to whore you & twist ur head
Guess u can call it lucky kid.......that I got a second for u in this thread
meh.
Free win, U w/ good in-sights so this punch will help u carry on dreamin
Ur birth might be celebrated like Jesus,
........................................tho dad’s still a mystery from those 3 men
ok.
Ur verse ends. fool-stop! We don’t need to talk abt. how wack u luk pup
Lines alone prove ur brain dead, I know cuz ur nose is also my hook up!
ok.
Ur punches arnt given land, like feudal to vassals, but from all the hassle
Got to admit Abb is king of the street.......since a mans home is his castle
ok.
I’ll hand u a loss pal W/ beef that gets into u, if not then the sauce shall
& seems Ab stuck on PMs-I shoved him so deep in-box ud think he’s social
ok.

*close, but i feel Ab edged the victory with his "good" line...

V/Abbadon.

[Taz™]

1.http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=328027
2.http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=328032
3.http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=328033
4.http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=328082
5.http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=328025

3-1.

[one way]

Hot rocking like afghani hash, bitch u’re next to b cremated
I’m unfuckable in this rap shit; u’ll b left textually frustrated
not too huge or hard
u can “act tough” but trust me kid u’ll never equal Chuck Norris
Lic’s Wit -less, so ill win mo’ nomination awards than Forest
I don't even get it
ill cause soreness to this whorish excuse for a rapper
ur odds of victory are so short, u shudda bought a ladder
weak
ima black adder stinging ur bladder with mad toxic lyrics
since u’ve already Lost your Soul, ill crush the rest of ur spirits
weak again
I can handle my liquor, but liquor look punch-drunk after my hits
ur a baby MC… u probably still sucking ya moms dry tits.
thats just gay shit

beef up your verse son, find solid concepts to work with


Usually I got no time for this, I’d beckon to whore you & twist ur head
Guess u can call it lucky kid.......that I got a second for u in this thread
not feeling it, nothing really there
Free win, U w/ good in-sights so this punch will help u carry on dreamin
Ur birth might be celebrated like Jesus,
........................................tho dad’s still a mystery from those 3 men
weak and indirect
Ur verse ends. fool-stop! We don’t need to talk abt. how wack u luk pup
Lines alone prove ur brain dead, I know cuz ur nose is also my hook up!
doesn't make a lot of sense
Ur punches arnt given land, like feudal to vassals, but from all the hassle
Got to admit Abb is king of the street.......since a mans home is his castle
that was ok, but indirect
I’ll hand u a loss pal W/ beef that gets into u, if not then the sauce shall
& seems Ab stuck on PMs-I shoved him so deep in-box ud think he’s social
don't get it

the dots were gay and stupid, I don't understand some of your stuff, couple lines were cool


vote lic

[Viktor Fallon]

Hot rocking like afghani hash, bitch u’re next to b cremated
I’m unfuckable in this rap shit; u’ll b left textually frustrated
^^^played opener
u can “act tough” but trust me kid u’ll never equal Chuck Norris
Lic’s Wit -less, so ill win mo’ nomination awards than Forest
^^^no
ill cause soreness to this whorish excuse for a rapper
ur odds of victory are so short, u shudda bought a ladder
^^^okay but its played
ima black adder stinging ur bladder with mad toxic lyrics
since u’ve already Lost your Soul, ill crush the rest of ur spirits
^^^good
I can handle my liquor, but liquor look punch-drunk after my hits
ur a baby MC… u probably still sucking ya moms dry tits.
^^^no wack closer


Vs


Usually I got no time for this, I’d beckon to whore you & twist ur head
Guess u can call it lucky kid.......that I got a second for u in this thread
^^^okay opener
Free win, U w/ good in-sights so this punch will help u carry on dreamin
Ur birth might be celebrated like Jesus,
........................................tho dad’s still a mystery from those 3 men
^^^decent only cause it was worded wrong it coulda been dope
Ur verse ends. fool-stop! We don’t need to talk abt. how wack u luk pup
Lines alone prove ur brain dead, I know cuz ur nose is also my hook up!
^^^okay
Ur punches arnt given land, like feudal to vassals, but from all the hassle
Got to admit Abb is king of the street.......since a mans home is his castle
^^^decent
I’ll hand u a loss pal W/ beef that gets into u, if not then the sauce shall
& seems Ab stuck on PMs-I shoved him so deep in-box ud think he’s social
^^^good closer


V/ licorice....his verse had way lees played shit...he had attempts an some good concepts the jesus line coulda been dope if you worded it diff but overall your verse was more consistent with fresher lines...abbadon you had one good line an the rest was weak alot of played shit...the ladder line was no..work on concepts.

[JayUNZ]

Ur punches arnt given land, like feudal to vassals, but from all the hassle
Got to admit Abb is king of the street.......since a mans home is his castle

vs

ima black adder stinging ur bladder with mad toxic lyrics
since u’ve already Lost your Soul, ill crush the rest of ur spirits


v/lic...abb u came to simple...and nothin stood out in this battle alot of self glorifiyn

[Taz™]

6-1

[OnKor]

Hot rocking like afghani hash, bitch u’re next to b cremated
I’m unfuckable in this rap shit; u’ll b left textually frustrated
Nah
u can “act tough” but trust me kid u’ll never equal Chuck Norris
Lic’s Wit -less, so ill win mo’ nomination awards than Forest
[n]Nope[/b]
ill cause soreness to this whorish excuse for a rapper
ur odds of victory are so short, u shudda bought a ladder
Ok
ima black adder stinging ur bladder with mad toxic lyrics
since u’ve already Lost your Soul, ill crush the rest of ur spirits
Lol, nice
I can handle my liquor, but liquor look punch-drunk after my hits
ur a baby MC… u probably still sucking ya moms dry tits.
Wack


vs.


Usually I got no time for this, I’d beckon to whore you & twist ur head
Guess u can call it lucky kid.......that I got a second for u in this thread
Nah
Free win, U w/ good in-sights so this punch will help u carry on dreamin
Ur birth might be celebrated like Jesus,
........................................tho dad’s still a mystery from those 3 men
Weak
Ur verse ends. fool-stop! We don’t need to talk abt. how wack u luk pup
Lines alone prove ur brain dead, I know cuz ur nose is also my hook up!
Nope
Ur punches arnt given land, like feudal to vassals, but from all the hassle
Got to admit Abb is king of the street.......since a mans home is his castle
Pretty played, but ok
I’ll hand u a loss pal W/ beef that gets into u, if not then the sauce shall
& seems Ab stuck on PMs-I shoved him so deep in-box ud think he’s social
Ok


Vote: Abbadon
I got him taking this for his lost soul punch. It was pretty nice. Licor's street punch was decent, but the concept had been used so much that it hardly hit. Those were the only punches that stood out, so I'm gonna give it to Abbadon