Life is a chess board - Page 2

User Tag List

Page 2 of 2 FirstFirst 1 2
Showing results 16 to 26 of 26

Thread: Life is a chess board

  1. #16
    Underdawgs on top Tebo's Avatar
    Join Date
    Jan 2007
    Location
    Kelowna, BC
    Age
    30
    Posts
    8,271
    Battle Record
    12-18

    Re: Life is a chess board

    The wording was good, the way you portrayed this peice, the origionality was great. Some parts of the rhyme scheme was basic, but was awsome. The way it began & concluded was just all metaphorically spoken. Very origional, excellent, brilliant.

  2. #17
    The Witness. Witty's Avatar
    Join Date
    Mar 2006
    Location
    Northern Ireland
    Age
    29
    Posts
    18,046
    Battle Record
    11-10

    Re: Life is a chess board

    thanks dude

    upping

    To view links or images in signatures your post count must be 50 or greater. You currently have 0 posts.


    24 x OM Hall Of Fame

  3. #18
    greatest of gods creation urban legendz's Avatar
    Join Date
    Jun 2006
    Age
    32
    Posts
    649
    Battle Record
    3-4

    Re: Life is a chess board

    Dam, what can I say this was one well organised piece, your had an abundance of creativity convey'd through out this piece, your story line was brillant, although i felt some parts could've used a little more attention, this piece had a significant amount of meta's and wonderful meta's at that, the imagery in this piece was vivid enought to paint a picture of what you were tring to portray with this piece, you exclamations and dialog and diction all worked for the best with the emotion, I understood every aspet of this piece, you had the vocab of a scholar, your piece created this free yet sophisticated atmosphere through out this iece and you kept that up to par throughout this piece, the rhyme scheme was wonderful, it's good to see a original rhyme scheme and not the old traitional abab aabb, you kept me interesed from the opener to the end and I think thats very important concear'n topicals, well enough said Lol this was an overall very respectable piece one of the best I read in some time.

    Favorite Lines:


    Screaming from her crib, my baby awakens
    As I gaze merrily vacant - complacent
    Patient with life, take it one-pace-at-a-time
    Newly bloomed buds are greatly sublime
    I smileÖ.and just lay back and kick it
    Play badminton, black jack and cricket
    Friday - Saturday - Sunday - days of the lord
    Where the face of the board, is outcast
    Like the ways of the sword
    The pawns move forward
    Kings and Queens step aside
    And on one of these days, even the bishops survive
    ------there goes another black------
    Sliced from the knife of the knight
    The whites are ahead, blacks are behind
    But continue to fight, their loss at the back of their mind
    The piece might be dead, but itís tracks are unsigned
    :realist:


    Please Leave Feed On This Link.
    Last edited by urban legendz; February 15th, 2007 at 02:09 PM

    To view links or images in signatures your post count must be 50 or greater. You currently have 0 posts.

  4. #19
    Threat Level Midnight Tim's Avatar
    Join Date
    Nov 2003
    Location
    Rancho Cucamonga
    Posts
    17,137
    Battle Record
    104-7
    Accomplishments (2)
    1-2 Champion
    1-2 Season Champion

    Re: Life is a chess board

    This was a very endepth piece i felt with alot of meaning that came along with it for reals loving the rhyme scheme and the whole approach you took with it very good flow also that had my eyes moving side to side with so stop to it good job my man. content wise this has everything in it so want to congrad you on this glad to see shit like this is the crew

    peep mine buddy
    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=327008

  5. #20
    You've Earned a Custom Title!
    Join Date
    Feb 2007
    Age
    33
    Posts
    374
    Battle Record
    11-4

    Re: Life is a chess board

    holy shit man... that was fuckin flawless... you had me readin that shit on the edge, full of great vocab and metaphores... I could find an amazing poetic flow just by reading out loud... great concept and great job of sticking to it throughout

    To view links or images in signatures your post count must be 50 or greater. You currently have 0 posts.

  6. #21
    You've Earned a Custom Title!
    Join Date
    Feb 2007
    Age
    33
    Posts
    374
    Battle Record
    11-4

    Re: Life is a chess board

    If you could give the feedback luv... it would be much appreciated...
    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=326783 good lookin once again...

    To view links or images in signatures your post count must be 50 or greater. You currently have 0 posts.

  7. #22

    Re: Life is a chess board

    While trying to engage their buyers, Cold Stone Creamery has energetically named their little, medium, and enormous sizes under their own image of Like It, Love it, and Gotta Have It. Visit my site.

  8. #23
    Composed and ready... A Disciple's Avatar
    Join Date
    Mar 2015
    Location
    CT
    Posts
    1,602

    Re: Life is a chess board

    Who woke me up like this?
    "Lets go deep inside the solitary mind of a madman who screams in the dark"
    ~ Hail Mary (Tupac)

    Death was easy, it was the defrib and coming back to life that hurt most - CLA

  9. #24

    Re: Life is a chess board

    Do not forget to visit my website.

  10. #25
    Composed and ready... A Disciple's Avatar
    Join Date
    Mar 2015
    Location
    CT
    Posts
    1,602

    Re: Life is a chess board

    I really have nothing to say and not entertaining wars on people you never even met. Maybe if I wasn't hit in my born city - it would be different. Or just trying to stand thru 6 years of hell since I finally woke up (too late of course). Maybe if my family wasn't lied to, or the hate so legal with a primitive instinct of pacing worrying about my young day and night ever since. Knowing you're sitting there smiling in their fucking face too. I could care less if you die slow too mother fucker. At least you're obviously not even innocent and didn't even deserve it. I'm not gonna write some hate piece back I'm just gonna say you look so fucking stupid. I was 16 when I watched Chris get murdered. The party prolly got shot up over your same cause and like... it's never the ones that deserve it though. I can't ever understand that Lord. +

    - - - Updated - - -

    It's like getting jumped by the entire underground and I ain't even seen my 2nd until like a week ago. Slaughtering babies???? LMFAO and I'm sorry but...
    "Lets go deep inside the solitary mind of a madman who screams in the dark"
    ~ Hail Mary (Tupac)

    Death was easy, it was the defrib and coming back to life that hurt most - CLA

  11. #26

    Re: Life is a chess board

    This was arguably the gayest shit I have ever had the misfortune to have ever read in my life.

    Terrible read!

    Why?

    It tried way too hard to use metaphorical references and fell flat. This was flat out just trying to be an edgelord and with a trainwreck of a result.

    First ballot Hall of Shame piece! Awful!

Similar Threads

  1. Chess
    By Sobe in forum The Lounge
    Replies: 2
    Last Post: September 30th, 2013, 03:11 AM
  2. Chess
    By Chris Black in forum The Lounge
    Replies: 19
    Last Post: August 17th, 2010, 03:46 PM
  3. chess
    By mickey spotz in forum Open Mic
    Replies: 3
    Last Post: August 10th, 2009, 08:00 AM
  4. Chess
    By Vis in forum The Lounge
    Replies: 16
    Last Post: February 19th, 2006, 01:23 PM
  5. Chess anyone?
    By Sublime D in forum The Lounge
    Replies: 31
    Last Post: December 18th, 2003, 01:22 PM

Posting Rules

  • You may not post new threads
  • You may not post replies
  • You may not post attachments
  • You may not edit your posts
  •