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Thread: Why?

  1. #1
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    Why?

    Why?
    I shed a tear for you, dear,
    Tear after tear,
    Silently rolling down my cheek,
    You were a feeling I couldn't keep.

    It was ripped away,
    I knew it would be some day,
    Please just tell me,
    Was I as good as you thought I would be?

    The touch of your hand,
    Makes me feel like nothing can,
    The thought that you've died,
    Tears me up inside.

    You were ripped away,
    I knew you would be some day,
    Please just tell me,
    Who the hell was he?

    I cut out your eyes,
    Sliced the insides of your thighs,
    What did you think I would do?
    Didn't think I would kill you, too?

    He was ripped away,
    You knew he would be some day,
    All you want to know,
    Is "How could it be so?"

    I sliced down your chest,
    And I was quite impressed,
    Your heart was still beating,
    Though your life was fleeting.

    You were ripped away,
    He knew you would be some day,
    I watched as he blinked,
    He said, "What will my parents think?"

    My Unbelieveable love,
    We were soaring high above,
    What on earth did you do?
    Because I havent got a clue.

    You were ripped away,
    I knew you would be some day,
    Please just tell me,
    Why?

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    Ok Now For The Feed Back...............

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    This Was Decent
    You Used Some Lines To Convey The Emotion Felt
    And Express The Feelings Of The Subject..Which Was Good
    The Direction An Content Was Average
    The Imagery Lacked A Bit..But Can Be Worked On

    Overall Nice Peice Keep Dropping

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    Quote Originally Posted by KaRoSiVe
    This Was Decent
    You Used Some Lines To Convey The Emotion Felt
    And Express The Feelings Of The Subject..Which Was Good
    The Direction An Content Was Average
    The Imagery Lacked A Bit..But Can Be Worked On

    Overall Nice Peice Keep Dropping
    Thanks

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    Uppinn For Feed Back..........................

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