"Put Me On Welfare"

[DeepNess07]

Put Me On Welfare

I used to take a flight of the imagination constantly
Addicted to dreaming of affection to meet me
My conception led me to believe that love was the only thing in this world that was free
But the harshest reality struck me when I woke up from the unrestrained dream
My visions were exterminated in front of me like an incurable disease
My youthful naïve illusions led my heart to stop bleeding
Because I was molested by confusion

Molested was I…by the perplexity of what I felt true love was in my irrational mind
My mind…that mind…which made me deem that nothing in life was a free thing
I tried to taste flavors which turned out to be bitter and rough
Devoured free love over and over but nothing special happened and I’ve had ENOUGH
Only sweet love occurs within the pockets of the rich and the fancy
We all need sweets which is why it’s taken expensively, why else do you think candy isn’t free?

Still, my rejections struck me like the fierce lightening tearing down a strong brick wall
Ultimately made me accept that love is the most expensive thing of them all
Reminding myself that an addict can never receive anything without charge
Addiction is not so easy to release its habit and being so poor in love will enlarge it
My desperation is out of happiness and joy, not out of the desperation of greed
So when I say: please put me on welfare
It’s because I can’t afford the only thing I want and need

-2005. Deepness07

Feedback would be nice.......thanks

[Krimm]

haha damn straight homie, love is deffenently expensive......Uppin, good work man, i was really feeling it, One Up, Peace

[DeepNess07]

cool, thanks man for replying

[ExDaGawd]

I was suprised this drop was actually as good as it was, The whole time I was reading I clearly could see everything you were talking about wich is a very good thing. Vocab was also on point good choice of words. Imagery, Story telling & creativity were also nicley displayed. Good work keep it up & keep elevating as high as you possibly can...

[Poeta Demonio]

I gained a clear image of what you were trying to say, that is a very good qiuality in a peice, i can tell you put alot of your own personal imagery in, almost like you've ben through it yourself... that i also liked as it helped me ease into the peice and want to carry on reading, you have alot of potential in poetry but you just need to learn how to use it to your full ability, Just carry on writting more stuff and i'm sure in no time you'll be reaching your full potential.

Well done i enjoyed the read.

[DeepNess07]

Thanks..

[DeepNess07]

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