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Thread: tru story: cheaterz ft. **ladydip**

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    tru story: cheaterz ft. **ladydip**

    Streetz hook
    Why stress? Why cry?
    Why wake up each die and cry
    All the years, now the pain and tears
    Other lovers in they life was ya only true fears
    Don’t trip, don’t cry, just kill em that instant
    Because love for you all along was obviously distant

    “Lady dip”
    feelings shorty a brush 'em off, hos fucked dem all
    can't keep his zipper close gotta get in they draws
    every chance he get mami know he cheatin'
    but mami scared to leave.....he controllin' n beatin'
    comin' home late expect some pleasure from his girl
    tears on her pillow regret thinkin' she was his world
    only one she loved but only one to tear her heart
    on her knees askin' God for sunny days so they won't part
    focus on the hos and the streetlife
    got so many kids bitches call this nigga dynamite
    wit a mean swag and vicious personality
    only thing he concerned about is his family
    keepin' bundles like dat nigga stack and goin' to strip clubs
    tryna get another nut off don't even use a glove
    for protection, gimic nigga showed ma perfection
    she trusted him never seen the pain and stressin'
    comin' her way, just wanna die today
    cause she just found out she's infected wit aids
    slittin' her wrist she stayed in it too long
    karma's a muafucka dont forget this song

    lady dip Hook
    don't know wat to expect ur infatuated
    wit the physical can't trust everything he/she sayin'
    it ain't always obvious but try n find the hints
    or u'll be hurtin' more than a person wit arthritis
    ya hearts cold tryna break thru the cold weather
    lack of love fa yaself wishin' shit a get better
    closin the doors ain't lettin' noone in
    cause u refuse to get ya heart broken again


    “L. Streetz”
    lies he said will never be told fake promises made
    as the years grew on sweet memories fade
    relationships a disguise women falling for the bullshit and deceit
    the nigga said he’ll change but that’s a lie he continued to repeat
    late nights alone in the house, she’s sweating from the stress
    because honestly, loyalty, and faith for him is what she did the best
    true bitches lie and cheat as well but it’s sin in all ways
    men have hearts too and also have depressional days
    commitment and truth both words are strong
    sad how some one finds love then finds out they were wrong
    teary eyes never dried the love is clearly denied
    hurtful,
    how a women finds out her husband has a newly-wed bride
    why deal with the pain? Why live through with a cheat?
    Heart breakers don’t kno the meaning of love so pain is the way they treat
    Suicide on the mind wanna die from the emotional break down inside
    He wouldn’t be faithful to her in any way despite the hardest she tried

    Streetz hook
    Why stress? Why cry?
    Why wake up each die and cry
    All the years, now the pain and tears
    Other lovers in they life was ya only true fears
    Don’t trip, don’t cry, just kill em that instant
    Because love for you all along was obviously distant

    ”lady dip”
    it ain't just men the woman doin' it too
    they wise about it, game slicker than the usual
    then you wonder why cheatin' goin' on it's obvious
    bitches scared to commit,niggas hobby is dickin' shit
    no offense to the good dudes but theres a few of those
    who tryna be the best man like Gin, Ty, Case n Joe
    just sayin' wat i feel yo n listen i'm far from a goody
    ain't neva had a man to cheat on one..attitude too shitty
    towards niggas...difficult to seperate the lames from real
    niggas holla on a regular talkin' bout can we chill
    and don't ask my name what type of shit u runnin'
    a fuckin' bitch hit list....exclude The Queen ya not fuckin'
    it'll cause u to get paranoid and trust nada
    i'm both of dat set niggas straight who try to play father
    to they girl i aint wit dat controllin' shit
    gotta be cheatin'...ya face bruised up n shit
    but dat don't matter to him he da nigga wit big wallets
    wait til he cross his own kind, they slimmin' his pockets
    makin' him feel less of a man each day
    regrettin' the days n nights he caused u pain

    “Streetz”
    wanna cause I scene, dude fucked around for a man! How?
    Take ya tek, 9, etc. blow em’ to bits just “pow”
    Believed the love was real Believing em was a mistake
    While looking str8 in they face you see they’re just honest fake
    Can’t understand how you did it, wasted ya life
    How could a man just disappear? left for his H.I.V infected ex-wife
    Moving on is so hard to do, but it’s the best
    Say fuck relationships period time to get some relief on ya chest
    All commit the crime of the lord Fake bitches and men
    Sad how a chick finds out her love has other kids, more than 10
    So sick, pussies and dicks all mixed together not giving a fuck
    Once the new is spit to you ya heart break suddenly struck




    lady dip Hook
    don't know wat to expect ur infatuated
    wit the physical can't trust everything he/she sayin'
    it ain't always obvious but try n find the hints
    or u'll be hurtin' more than a person wit arthritis
    ya hearts cold tryna break thru the cold weather
    lack of love fa yaself wishin' shit a get better
    closin the doors ain't lettin' noone in
    cause u refuse to get ya heart broken again

    Streetz hook
    Why stress? Why cry?
    Why wake up each die and cry
    All the years, now the pain and tears
    Other lovers in they life was ya only true fears
    Don’t trip, don’t cry, just kill em that instant
    Because love for you all along was obviously distant…..


    …… love is a muafucka
    THE FAMILY.

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    d@mn dis made me feel bad lol jus playin but if dis tru dis part waz fucked up

    comin' her way, just wanna die today
    cause she just found out she's infected wit aids

    can u give me feedback and place an honest vote on 1 of my battles ma thanx

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    ^^ that's something you should talk to lady dip about taht's apart of her verse doe. and battles have nothing to with this thread. i try to vote on as many battles as i can so when i come across yours upon time, i will be more than honored to check it out.
    next, more feed back on this..
    give some good feed doe.. not no pety type shit poeple dammm
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    O''K could of been more creative but I understand wat ya mean all girls feel this way structure could''ve been better too but it wasn't that bad just take every1's advice N' elavate straight pieace though

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    upppin for feed-back on diz shit......................
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    uppin for feed dammmm............. is it so hard to just say somethin.........
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    i enjoyed it ma
    the topic is usually something all chicks talk about i liked hw you both didnt juz talk about nigaz bein cheaters tho cuz' females are too. ladydip, u gotta work on your flow and work on better grammer as well. the rhymin needs sum work but this was tight
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    you said honest...

    first off, you lack intelligence. It sounds like something some whack MTV rapper would sit and write. It isnt horrible but you lack a lot. The rhyme scheme was weak. The imagery wasnt there at all. You told a story but there wasnt a metaphors and similies in it at all that really stud out. You seem kind of knew so I for a newer person, not bad. Keep writing.
    (oh) and drop that whole gangster/ slang speech. WHen you post your verse, make in REAL english...

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    yeah i agree it was a chore to read, good story , depth was there but too simplistic

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    yeah this that street shit

    keep em bumpin on the g tip fosho
    am feelin this joint

    stay da fuck up

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    Streetz hook
    Why stress? Why cry?
    Why wake up each die and cry
    All the years, now the pain and tears
    Other lovers in they life was ya only true fears
    Don’t trip, don’t cry, just kill em that instant
    Because love for you all along was obviously distant

    ^^^i liked da hook very much.. its a good way 2 start off a song, & it has done in this case...

    feelings shorty a brush 'em off, hos fucked dem all
    can't keep his zipper close gotta get in they draws
    every chance he get mami know he cheatin'
    but mami scared to leave.....he controllin' n beatin'
    comin' home late expect some pleasure from his girl
    tears on her pillow regret thinkin' she was his world

    ^^^i loved tha way ya started ya verse off, i was deffo feelin these lines...

    focus on the hos and the streetlife
    got so many kids bitches call this nigga dynamite

    ^^^these two lines are great.. especially tha last 1... lol

    lady dip Hook
    don't know wat to expect ur infatuated
    wit the physical can't trust everything he/she sayin'
    it ain't always obvious but try n find the hints
    or u'll be hurtin' more than a person wit arthritis
    ya hearts cold tryna break thru the cold weather
    lack of love fa yaself wishin' shit a get better
    closin the doors ain't lettin' noone in
    cause u refuse to get ya heart broken again

    ^^^liked ya meta in ya hook, it went really well wit tha song ma'

    lies he said will never be told fake promises made
    as the years grew on sweet memories fade
    relationships a disguise women falling for the bullshit and deceit
    the nigga said he’ll change but that’s a lie he continued to repeat
    late nights alone in the house, she’s sweating from the stress
    because honestly, loyalty, and faith for him is what she did the best

    ^^ ya started was really good, straight!


    aiite its pretty long.. feel me das why i ent gona qwote no mo' cah its a long thing.. i read all of it.. jus cant qwote tha other 2 verses...
    anyroad... yeah i enjoyed readin this cah its one of tha minority pieces u will read on RB that r true... i can understan this piece was directed 2 both males and females.. but it was straight 2 tha point.. & thoze kats that left feed & said all kats feel like that lmfao.. thats were ya guys are wrong coz not all bitches feel like that.. i aint no perfect writer myself but my advise gonna be.. next time if ya writing add some multies, meta's & improve on tha vocab.. for all i know it could be a rushed piece that both ya put 2gether.. stil other than that i liked this piece it was niice..
    props 2 both ya mami's.. good shiit!!! 1
    Last edited by EyeCandy; February 4th, 2006 at 12:06 PM
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    wdf yall what happened 2 tha decent feed???...
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    thanks for the feed uppin for more....decent ones as well.

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    Little Work

    First things first you two had a good idea
    but this should have been a rough draft
    Personally I would have treaTed this song like a story telling song and because story telling songs are story you should go through the writing process like your writing a story which you where. I would have went over each bar seeing if I could rewrite it to make it sound more profound or smarter not to say your not.
    I would have put a little bit more multies in and couple of hard hitting punch lines
    But it's easier to see mistake from another persons eyes so keep uppin


    ALL IN ALL IT WAS COOL.
    BUT I HAVE A FEELING YOU CAN DO GREAT!
    Last edited by Da-Gipht; February 4th, 2006 at 04:09 PM Reason: spelled something wrong
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    thanks for the honest feed much luv

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