Quoting The Silence.

[MF Chaos]

this was dope iwas feeling it good job
wit dat up yo http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=263249

[Po']

I would leave feed, but, you give me a half of line on "yo this was dope."

I appreciate you reading this, if you did that at most. But atleast leave some feed.

Until then, fuck your peice.

[Po']

Up.

[Issue]

I would leave feed, but, you give me a half of line on "yo this was dope."

I appreciate you reading this, if you did that at most. But atleast leave some feed.

Until then, fuck your peice.

I left you good feed, go return the favour on mine .

William Nolan

[Po']

Motherfucker I know. Lol.

I have a basketball game.

I said I'll do it asap.

[Automatic.]

this was excellent. You kept on topic throughout the entire piece, vocab was good, and imagery was there. Flow was good as well. I normally dont like that structure with all of the periods, but thats just imo. Keep it up.

[Po']

Thankyou.

[Po']

Up?

[.Silence.]

I really liked how you approched this topic here.I read this piece and it was dope.You had a good opener to open peoples eyes to read the piece and thats good.And as we go further into the piece the Imagry and emotion gets real strong in this piece.Cuz when I read it I could picture and really feel what was going on in this piece and that is real good.And your structure was real good and the use of your of you vocabulary was good.Overall this was a really dope piece from you mad props homie.Keep up the good work.Hope to see some more dope stuff from you soon.And whenever you get a chance can you hit the link up in my sig thanks

[Po']

Jeah.

Thanks yo.

[Po']

Alright.

I'll have time way later today.

Leave links and I'll get to it.

[Po']

I will up this for the last time.

[B.I.Detained.]

Aight then, Po. Straight from the off, you were into your piece.
Like you put yourself in the persons shoes, and just vented what's
on your chest. Which to me is a good quality to have because
it can only draw more emotion from yourself. The father/son
concept has been written about before, but you tackled it in
your own way and didn't let up. What I did see was some
forced rhyming which in all honestly, wasn't needed. But I could
see your effort to try to keep it on point. Overall you had all
the hall marks of a decent writer. All you gotta do is keep
it up. . & KEEP WRITING. Cuz you're gonna be dope.

-Brix.

[The Vortex]

pretty cool.. tite writing.. rythm more like a poem than a rap... some decent voc's n mults... concept was ok ish.. still you gave it originality so kudos for that..nice style n flow..
i like the way you flowed the lines to the next and linked the bars .. good internal rhymes..good imagery yaeh..

dope drop.. stay 1


rtf
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=263288

[Po']

Thanks Vortex.

And Brix, yeah man. Thanks, boosts my confidence.

Im writing one right now matter fact. Once I get out of school.