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    Animal
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    Time Is Money

    Told you I'd be the first to kill you, then hold ya last
    its overcast, & the night has yet to give us a thrill dude
    See, when we were young, our pleas turned fun
    & our unfinished agendas at the time, returned done
    Now why I say the night's day, hasn't excited us
    because the fight in us, has turned into timed play
    We made this decision, to give us precision
    into what we do best, we're two less, whatever, its in'em
    Started as youth, robbin banks, it may seem retarted to you
    but these throbbin aches, could only be parted in two
    Went from the korean store, to the italian pizza parlor
    we hit ya harder, but now the part we be in, bores
    Our goal was simple, to be apart of bigger things
    cause now we're lookin to get on these six figure dreams
    Jay had it set, one shot, we planned it...yet
    our boys gave us the looks that a faggot gets
    They doubted the plan, looked at'em...
    "get the hate out ya man!" as I seen the mook in them


    . . .
    Money's in the bag, we out, fleed south
    we look back, the cherries lit up in the scene's mouth
    . . .


    This could've all been avoided, see we had this new guy
    who thought we was too fly, but this fucker just annoyed us
    Done by a minute & a half, but over by 30 seconds
    Now every moment reminds us of that dirty lesson
    & as the seconds goes by, we realized the mind is funny
    now we're in a race against time, cause yes now....

    Time Is Money

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    Last edited by Jacent.; November 13th, 2005 at 05:37 PM

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    zpretty short but pretty good...overal this was like a 9/10..because of the excellent vocab and good rhymes..rhymes were complex not simple....topic was cool...i liked it....i was feelin this peice...good strcuutre and flow was smooth..nicely done..keep it up and can you leave feed on my drop (Half-Life) thanks..peace

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    good stuff man, enjoyable read. good topic, well written, nice internal type shit going on as well as solid storytelling. i liked the ending of this:

    & as the seconds goes by, we realized the mind is funny
    now we're in a race against time, cause yes now....

    Time Is Money

    keepin droppin man. peace

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    infamy101
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    tat shit was hot yo

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    pretty nice joimt..told the story well..and used the vocabulary skills well...had a good touch of ghetto slang to it..was presented decently
    i felt a few lines in the first verse couof been developed a little more as those shorter lines make it lose flow somewhat..cool rhymes

    stay upz
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    this was iight jace. i don't think you really tried too hard or dropped to your full potential though. it was kinda boring and simplistic.. cliche storyline and nothing real captivating in your verse. i mean it's not horrible, don't get me wrong.. it's just nothing special or unique. it doesn't stand out. on a positive note, your rhyme scheme was pretty cool. i just felt you coulda done more with the topic.
    Been a real one.

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    Tryumph
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    hot ish...actually like it a lot time is money

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