"try To Switch It Up A Lil"

[Lil'Young]

I'm Ridin' While Ya Dirty, Cuz They Gunnin For My Top
I Ain't Duckin And Dodgin, I'm Only Runnin From The Cops
Spendin Grand By The Grand By Hundred On My Watch
Just Got Another Buddy, And It Holds A 100 Shots
I Never Had A Role Model, Cuz He Was In A Box
So I'm Up In The Club With Eather, A Heater Or A House
Everyday There's Another Nigga Bleedin On The Block
But We Ridin' With Them Burners On, Even When It's Hot
Don't no Body Want To Step Up Cuz They Know How I Rock
When That Choppa Hit's Yea Remember I told yea So Dont Act Like You Shock
Therrs Only One Me So Dont Try To Take My Spot
So Keep Running Yo Mouth Boi, You About-a Get Knock


"JUST TRYING TO DO SOME DIFFRENT SHIT"

[AbusivE]

you need to drop two links that you have left DECENT feed back on or credz will close this.. (He asked for some help)

[GenoH]

this was aight man..5/10

[Issue]

Narrr, I wasn't feeling this man. You had weak punches and it seemed repetetive to me, like you kept going over the same thing. But really thats what short pieces on topics like this are, just recycling the same old rhymes and punches and coming up with a slightly different end product but really its just the same as the one before. Try executing your punches in a creative manner, and stretch out your piece so it doesnt look simple or get repetetive.

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