Expo vs. Revel

[Revel]

10 Lines
Verses due sometime tonight
No Feeding
No Crew/Hate/DR/BS Votes
All Other Rules Apply

[Revel]

checkin in.....

[Expo.]

I'm here, man.

G/luck, I'll drop in a little while.

[Revel]

Who said this whore can rhyme? i'ma ignore ya lines
u could withdraw ya daylight savings n still not afford ta' shine
this bitch a terror? nah, Expo's known ta' git ravaged
w/o a mode of attack, there's no need ta' sift thru your emotional baggage
i know u aint shit, kid.....and ya ego startles me
but when a punch of my caliber hits ya chest, u'll agree hole-heartedly
you're weak & inconsistent, i'ma hit ya verse n crash thru
ya family ties...be like clip-ons the way i easily detach u
my persona's powerful, enough for u ta' duck bouts
u were the heir to the throne,
..............till i closed the window & shut u the fuck out


.....i don't use quote marks or none of that....so don't vote if you're an idiot that doesnt git wordplay & shit

[Expo.]

Get off of the vet's nuts, it won't help you play bad
Cause Revel's always chasing dick, like Captain Ahab
I'm cutting this fag, he ain't dope, just a smelly rapper
And ain't shit but a waist of talent, like belly dancers
If you were audio, I'd never listen to your bad tracks
In this battle..
I'm like the idiot who ain't get the joke, I'ma laugh last
Whack? Nah, my professions to defeat and son herbs
Cause Rev's got no lines, like the streets in the Suburbs
Plus this Punk lacks punches, your certainly weak kid
I'll edit your lines..
And put a red dot on your i's, & I ain't talkin proof readin

[Jacent.]

revel

i know u aint shit, kid.....and ya ego startles me
but when a punch of my caliber hits ya chest, u'll agree hole-heartedly

expo

Get off of the vet's nuts, it won't help you play bad
Cause Revel's always chasing dick, like Captain Ahab
I'm cutting this fag, he ain't dope, just a smelly rapper
And ain't shit but a waist of talent, like belly dancers
Plus this Punk lacks punches, your certainly weak kid
I'll edit your lines..
And put a red dot on your i's, & I ain't talkin proof readin

v/ expo

other dude wasn't really good

[Princess]

mm kay here goes plz return tha favour
expo
Get off of the vet's nuts, it won't help you play bad
Cause Revel's always chasing dick, like Captain Ahab
bad opner

I'm cutting this fag, he ain't dope, just a smelly rapper
And ain't shit but a waist of talent, like belly dancers
ok

If you were audio, I'd never listen to your bad tracks
In this battle..
I'm like the idiot who ain't get the joke, I'ma laugh last
nah

Whack? Nah, my professions to defeat and son herbs
Cause Rev's got no lines, like the streets in the Suburbs
not bad

Plus this Punk lacks punches, your certainly weak kid
I'll edit your lines..
And put a red dot on your i's, & I ain't talkin proof readin
dint rhyme bad finisher

expo
Who said this whore can rhyme? i'ma ignore ya lines
u could withdraw ya daylight savings n still not afford ta' shine
good opner

this bitch a terror? nah, Expo's known ta' git ravaged
w/o a mode of attack, there's no need ta' sift thru your emotional baggage
nope

i know u aint shit, kid.....and ya ego startles me
but when a punch of my caliber hits ya chest, u'll agree hole-heartedly
good

you're weak & inconsistent, i'ma hit ya verse n crash thru
ya family ties...be like clip-ons the way i easily detach u
lol nice

my persona's powerful, enough for u ta' duck bouts
u were the heir to the throne,
..............till i closed the window & shut u the fuck out
good finisher

ight overall expo took this he had stronger punches and they landed good he had sum nice personals as well
vote:expo

[Revel]

^????

that shit's confusin, u called both of us Expo....& u didnt poll your vote...

Uppin #1

[cutastraphe]

revel-ok flow, ok structure, good wrdplay n vocab usage, sum aight punches sum witty

expo-ok structure, ok flow, sum aight wrdplay and vocab usage, sum ok punches, sum witty

Overall-I think both came kinda creative, or atleast tried to with the punches but i thought expo was a lil stronger..it was close though

vote-expo

peep my sig return a vote

[Expo.]

Yeah Revel, That vote don't count man.

Thanks Cata, I don't have enough post's though.

[Assazin]

Originally posted by:Revel
Who said this whore can rhyme? i'ma ignore ya lines
u could withdraw ya daylight savings n still not afford ta' shine
DIDN'T LIKE
this bitch a terror? nah, Expo's known ta' git ravaged
w/o a mode of attack, there's no need ta' sift thru your emotional baggage
NOPE
i know u aint shit, kid.....and ya ego startles me
but when a punch of my caliber hits ya chest, u'll agree hole-heartedly
OK
you're weak & inconsistent, i'ma hit ya verse n crash thru
ya family ties...be like clip-ons the way i easily detach u
BETTER
my persona's powerful, enough for u ta' duck bouts
u were the heir to the throne,
..............till i closed the window & shut u the fuck out
THAT WAS YA BEST BAR AND PUNCH

Originally posted by:Expo
Get off of the vet's nuts, it won't help you play bad
Cause Revel's always chasing dick, like Captain Ahab
NOPE
I'm cutting this fag, he ain't dope, just a smelly rapper
And ain't shit but a waist of talent, like belly dancers
NOPE
If you were audio, I'd never listen to your bad tracks
In this battle..
I'm like the idiot who ain't get the joke, I'ma laugh last
STUPID
Whack? Nah, my professions to defeat and son herbs
Cause Rev's got no lines, like the streets in the Suburbs
WEIRD BUT ALRIGHT I GUESS
Plus this Punk lacks punches, your certainly weak kid
I'll edit your lines..
And put a red dot on your i's, & I ain't talkin proof readin
DIDNT EVEN RHYME PLUS NOT A CLOSER

V/Revel
for overall better flow with more hard hitting punches

hit the link back

[Mr. Write]

Revel-
Who said this whore can rhyme? i'ma ignore ya lines
u could withdraw ya daylight savings n still not afford ta' shine
-decent

this bitch a terror? nah, Expo's known ta' git ravaged
w/o a mode of attack, there's no need ta' sift thru your emotional baggage
-nah

i know u aint shit, kid.....and ya ego startles me
but when a punch of my caliber hits ya chest, u'll agree hole-heartedly
-very nice

you're weak & inconsistent, i'ma hit ya verse n crash thru
ya family ties...be like clip-ons the way i easily detach u
-good

my persona's powerful, enough for u ta' duck bouts
u were the heir to the throne,
..............till i closed the window & shut u the fuck out
-meh

Expo

Get off of the vet's nuts, it won't help you play bad
Cause Revel's always chasing dick, like Captain Ahab
-decent, kinda played

I'm cutting this fag, he ain't dope, just a smelly rapper
And ain't shit but a waist of talent, like belly dancers
-ok punch, couldve been way better

If you were audio, I'd never listen to your bad tracks
In this battle..
I'm like the idiot who ain't get the joke, I'ma laugh last
-decent

Whack? Nah, my professions to defeat and son herbs
Cause Rev's got no lines, like the streets in the Suburbs
-meh

Plus this Punk lacks punches, your certainly weak kid
I'll edit your lines..
And put a red dot on your i's, & I ain't talkin proof readin
-not bad

This battle was pretty close ....expo was consistant with his mediocre punches while Revel had some very good ones and some that werent the best, but i think revel took this because he had harder punches overall

Vote: Revel
Plz return the favor, link in my sig

[the cool]

Revel:
Who said this whore can rhyme? i'ma ignore ya lines
u could withdraw ya daylight savings n still not afford ta' shine
--okay opener, the 2nd line saved the boring 1st one
this bitch a terror? nah, Expo's known ta' git ravaged
w/o a mode of attack, there's no need ta' sift thru your emotional baggage
--kinda weak, and stretched
i know u aint shit, kid.....and ya ego startles me
but when a punch of my caliber hits ya chest, u'll agree hole-heartedly
--2nd line also saved the first here, the first sucked
you're weak & inconsistent, i'ma hit ya verse n crash thru
ya family ties...be like clip-ons the way i easily detach u
--not bad...not great, either
my persona's powerful, enough for u ta' duck bouts
u were the heir to the throne,
..............till i closed the window & shut u the fuck out
--kinda boring closer

Expo:
Get off of the vet's nuts, it won't help you play bad
Cause Revel's always chasing dick, like Captain Ahab
--wow, weak first line, and gay lines suck...so, this bar sucked
I'm cutting this fag, he ain't dope, just a smelly rapper
And ain't shit but a waist of talent, like belly dancers
--would've been better if...well, if it was better. It was just lame.
If you were audio, I'd never listen to your bad tracks
In this battle..
I'm like the idiot who ain't get the joke, I'ma laugh last
--not good either, very basic..."I'd never listen to your bad tracks"...punch that didn't hit at all
Whack? Nah, my professions to defeat and son herbs
Cause Rev's got no lines, like the streets in the Suburbs
--okay bar here, one of the better ones
Plus this Punk lacks punches, your certainly weak kid
I'll edit your lines..
And put a red dot on your i's, & I ain't talkin proof readin
--okay, the best one of all

vote--Revel. he had some okay punches, and kinda of good flow, but not that great. kinda creative with the daylight savings time stuff, etc, but it didn't really help. Expo's needs to be better, it had very basic vocab.

[Revel]

uppin #2....i'll return the favor with an honest vote

[eyeVSeye]

Without question, expo. Revel just didnt have the flow or punches to compete with what Expo dropped. That captain ahab line was ingenius.

v/ Expo