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Thread: Emulated - Face To Face With My Child's Killer

  1. November 11th, 2004, 09:04 PM #1
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    Emulated - Face To Face With My Child's Killer

    Killer's name is Mr. Smith

    Face to face with 'em, looking to straight kill 'em.
    Soul might fly away, but the body won't escape wit 'em
    Thinkin bout puttin the 9 to 'em, then clap at his head
    Like 2pac said, one of the sweetest joys is revenge
    He's looking at me, like 'Dawg, wtf you gon' tryna do!'
    Thinking, *damn, I wanna see these bullets go right through u*
    He took a puff at his blunt, started looking and smiled.....
    'Whatchu got, pull it out, you'll end up like ya child'
    Laughin, I'm ready to smash em, bang the shotty........
    But then, the consequences, what if they find the body?
    What if the do me like Gotti, toss me in the bing for years.
    Is it worth it? I'm needed here. Is it worth those tears......?
    Kid is cocky, he thinks his psychology can stop me
    He know either I get killed by him, or the D's gon pop me.
    *Man walks in, see's me* 'Hey easy Papi...........
    I got a wife and 3 kids, that'd kill THEM...... if you shot ME'
    'Infact I do , tell em the story, what this man did to me...'
    Then the killer says 'Haha, and lemme tell you dawg, it was easy B'
    *Puerto Rican guy: 'Oh shit son, you really did that to this man'
    Killer: Hell yea, 5 shots to the gut, and I'd get at the rest of his fam
    Me: Yeah son? Well right now I'm glad you filled em wit lead, jokes on you instead
    Killer:Huh?....................................... .................................................
    ......Puerto Rican: Mr. Smith, I'm an undercover agent, put ya hands over ur head


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    Tryin to Be heartless.........But thats not Being A Man
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  2. November 11th, 2004, 09:19 PM #2
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    Ehh. this was decent. not the best there is. i could tell that it was sorda rushed.
    you know what im sayin?
    anyways, the concept was kinda generic and its been done plenty of times,
    although the content had a very good perspective to it,
    like a twist that came together well.
    you understand what im sayin?
    overall, this was a nice read. no complaints my way man.
    keep writing.
    be strong and stay strong.

    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=154671

    Return.....Thanx.
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  3. November 12th, 2004, 02:06 PM #3
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    Feedback foo!

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    I live High in the essence of unbleviable Gods Hands
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    Tryin to Be heartless.........But thats not Being A Man
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  4. November 12th, 2004, 02:41 PM #4
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    u got me messed up tha agent was the Puerto Rican lol
    u could of atleast have had the last words like ""damn foo dats wut u get"" u know

    but it was aight for a rhyme no twisting conclusion jus simple i guess thats tha problem
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  5. November 12th, 2004, 04:08 PM #5
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    Yea..this was ok. The twist was sort of lame, because I know you tried to make this have a twist, but it was pretty obvious and lame. Yea, otherwise this was decent. Subject matter a little played, but you wrote this uniquely. The biggest problem with it was that it was too simple, nahmean?
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  6. November 12th, 2004, 09:12 PM #6
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    it had its flair but it dimmed fast u got talent you just need to elivate focus on the theme exploit all leading events
    to love something,is to die for it ,if you do, your a martyr , but these days music is morbid, false carters ..prohet's for prophet no lie, look how our last martyr was crucified. to put it in it symplicity, you aint true...you wouldnt sacrifice a few dollars for authenticity..
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  7. November 12th, 2004, 11:26 PM #7
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    word...thanks for the feed, uppin

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    I live High in the essence of unbleviable Gods Hands
    I love like roses and sink threw fingers just Like Sand

    From Bein Satans Angel..To Hating The actional Clan
    Tryin to Be heartless.........But thats not Being A Man
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  8. November 13th, 2004, 12:26 AM #8
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    not the best in flow kinda weird at points but like it was woth the read just not quite as good
    Just Dope.
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