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    An Idle Farmers Growth (With Picture)

    This is my first drop of Prose Poetry.
    And quite possibly, the first Prose Poetry piece on RB...
    (If you dont know what prose poetry is, ask me and ill try to explain)


    It was a slow season of planting seeds but the idle Farmer had gotten accustomed
    to his barren fields. When it came time to re-sow his crops, doubts couldnt help but
    reminisce on the debilitating winter storms, overbearing spring floods, relentless
    summer heat and autumns perpetual decay. Regardless, the Farmer decided to
    scatter seeds across the dirt and as he did sow, he cast desperate prayers to
    accompany the seeds as they spread over the weathered field. As time went
    on, the plants grew and produced. Mother Nature and Father Earth nurtured
    their young accordingly, from a distance, but it was the Farmer who first saw
    the sprouting of roots grab hold into his freshly overturned soil. From that point on,
    he devoted every drop of time, every dew of hope and every light mist of
    passion into the flourishing of his beloved. For he knew one day, elegant
    blossoms would burst forth with their heavenly fragrance filling his soul, and
    at that exact moment, his heart would bloom anew to become a thornless rose.

    Soon after his revival, the Farmer noticed that even though he had tossed
    the seeds randomly, they had formed perfect rows and spanned miles in
    unending straight lines. Instantly he could tell, this was the harvest he had
    been waiting for. The harvest of a life time that would sustain him and a
    family for the rest of his gardening days.

    If only God would send him a tractor...
    to cultivate his life.




    * Bounce, I know I got more than 2 open, so just close the oldest ones. thanks.
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    ille dit this with a reply soon...im a lil busy...jus want you to knwo ill hit this up
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    ^alright, appreciate it. im going to hit up some other pieces, havent responded to anything in a few days.
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    this was a nice drop I thought that the imagery was very strong and I liked your narrative voice in this peice. If I had to make a critism I would say that you were a bit wordy in places but that's just your style of writing. strong peice
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    i don't know if you remember my prose peice "a man and his spot" but that got slept on fa real. 45 people read it but I think 2 people responded and you were one of them. so don't feel bad if people don't show love on this peice
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    hmm, i could feel this poem, i know what its like to farm, plant, sow each seed, and then when it all looks bad, sow the last seed with a lil extra love, and pray, i realy thought it had a nice flow to it, pretty simple and straight forward, vocab was good, lil bit of hummor at the end, and the picture gave a lil extra character-peace

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    Thanks dubois. yeah i dont know, i guess prose poetry isnt as popular? but i like it.

    thanks for your reply aslo sharpshooter.


    anyone else?...
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    this was actually an above average peice.
    i really enjoyed reading it, and would have love to see more to it.
    anyways, this had such an creative imagery i haven't seen in awhile.
    it was creative at the same time empty.
    you know what im sayin.
    as i read through the first half of it, i was begginning to wonder,
    what emotions you were trying to express in this peice.
    nonetheless, this was a nice read. really enjoyable. i give it a 8.
    keep doin what you do.

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    return........thanx.

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    you didn't close it
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    ^you didnt edit in your reply....


    doesnt the "two open" rule conflict with the "one a day" rule?
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    That was great, i have no read much prose in modern english.. just shakespear and stuff. Good job, very original. Haha
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    Quote Originally Posted by MiNdLeSs
    ^you didnt edit in your reply....


    doesnt the "two open" rule conflict with the "one a day" rule?


    No, not at all, it actually helps to keep the front page from being over run with bitten material and just BS drops. If a poet is writting ten poems a day, that means they are not putting everything into them that they can. You should post your best work here for reply, not every single thing you write! One poem a day rule does not get inforced unless you have more than two open threads and then post two or more poems in a single day. I had to close thread by timeless like hotcakes, now we can all see why it's not a good idea.

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