Street Legend vs. EX-s

[Street Legend]

i saw the rules doc............

[Street Legend]

check...........

[EX-s]

chekin in
spit in 30 mins
I wanna hear some hard shit man

[Street Legend]

yo.............

Dont jump to conclusions on battles ive been through
Cuz my scripts effect ya body as a whole, physical and mental
Leave you exahausted............. my lyrics takin ya breath
Need a rush to spit so you be takin the EX(exctasy)
you failin in ya class..........im givin you a lyrical test
you have no skills and after this loss you will confess
Im not here to exaggerate or boast you confident
the verse you put here is gonna be irrelevant
repetitiveness is what i expect, mind not calculatin correctly
puttin this fack cat to sleep like he was born wit narcolepcy

[Street Legend]

last line should say...........
puttin this fake* cat to sleep like he was born like narcolepcy

[EX-s]

hey yall, this guys dumb as shit,
he asked me to go first, in a blindspit,
legend,man tha votes wont pend,
yo coz in tha end, ya gunna wish that all ya dids defend,
i know ya gunna step up an front, but i also know its all pretend,
an wen ya rap its like you tryna start sum fake wrestlin trend,
hey man ya want alittle help? coz im first grade,
if ya do jus call me, 1800 lyric aid,
watch ya step, this is your only warning,
step wrong up in here, an ima put your whole family in mourning

[Inzane Lyricist]

Opening:Gotta give it to Ex
Wordplayefinitely Street
Punches:Street
Structure:Street
Flow:Street
Ending:Street (Love the Narcoplepsy shit)
V/Street

[The Under Study]

This was a one sided battle
Street u took this one obviously
Street- You had a good flow and structure, with wordplay that was pretty good too. Nice use of vocabulary, u still couldve used more multis in ya verse though. Good punches and a so so personal about him on the Ex line. You had a ok opener, but u had a very decent closure i was feelin that line.

Ex- Oh boy, well lets see ya flow and structure was pretty off. Listen, you need to use more rhyme complexity and expand your vocabulary to have a betta wordplay. Trust me it will get u wins. Ya rhymes were too elementary. Punches were corny and u didnt seem to have any personals. Elevate man seriously.

v/Street Legend

[EX-s]

could sum1 comment but this lil bitch
could sum1 who counts give they opinion

[EX-s]

At least philosopha can tell me wat im doin wrong
an tellin me how ta improve
even know he vote against me

[Street Legend]

upp...............

[adonai]

I'll poll this vote as soon as i get 100 posts (not long)

[/B]Street[/B]: you had a few nice phonics. rhyming words were okay but rhyming confident and irrelevant doesn't sound right (confident is a 3 sylable word, so you should rhyme all 3 sylables) i heard a similar narcalepsy line before, but i only heard it once, in a freestyle battle, so i doubt it was bitten. structure was good. flow was fairly good.

[/B]Ex[/B] one thing that stands out in your verse is the poor flow. some lines are twice as long as the next, which isn't good. You should try to make every line have the same number of sylables (improves structure and flow if you do this). structure wasn't brilliant either. The closer should be your strongest punch, as it's a good way to end the battle (notice how street's strongest punch is the closer?). I didn't really like the 'spit first in a blind spit' line, doesn't sound right. sounds a little played.

Overall, i think street won that because he had better structure, flow and punches

[DaTrusHurtz]

hey yall, this guys dumb as shit,
he asked me to go first, in a blindspit,

You could have had a good opener as this was a good punch, but you didn't work it well.. could have made it longer and more complex

legend,man tha votes wont pend,
yo coz in tha end, ya gunna wish that all ya dids defend,

Doesn't flow well and doesn't make much sense.. doesn't hit

i know ya gunna step up an front, but i also know its all pretend,
an wen ya rap its like you tryna start sum fake wrestlin trend,

Fake wrestlin trend is alright, but you didn't really relate it to him and make into a punch.. more of a statement

hey man ya want alittle help? coz im first grade,
if ya do jus call me, 1800 lyric aid,

Again, a decent idea, just you made the lines too short that it didn't flow well

watch ya step, this is your only warning,
step wrong up in here, an ima put your whole family in mourning

Not a strong closer, but not too bad either

Dont jump to conclusions on battles ive been through
Cuz my scripts effect ya body as a whole, physical and mental

I don't think that rhymes so yeah...

Leave you exahausted............. my lyrics takin ya breath
Need a rush to spit so you be takin the EX(exctasy)

If you ever have to explain a word you use it's prolly no good. It was a good idea though

you failin in ya class..........im givin you a lyrical test
you have no skills and after this loss you will confess

It works, just very simple.. elevate

Im not here to exaggerate or boast you confident
the verse you put here is gonna be irrelevant

Decent one

repetitiveness is what i expect, mind not calculatin correctly
puttin this fack cat to sleep like he was born wit narcolepcy

Good closer, finishes the deal

Overall - Street your verse had some weak points in it, but you finished strong and took this one. Ex, keep elevatin

Vote - Street

[Street Legend]

up..............

[-KareLess-]

hey yall, this guys dumb as shit,
he asked me to go first, in a blindspit,


^^this was a nice line..but your only one..
ex.. your flow was choppy.. Lines were Short and amuture..
your opener was better then any Line you had including streets..

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street..
your flow was smoother.. the Punches were Mild..
nothing stood out, but you kept the Punches consistant..

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punches-tie
vocab-tie
personals-none
ryme scheme-street
Intrest-street(I lost Intrest in ex's verse faster)..


vote-street Legend


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