Favorite Hobby

[Nan]

A tongue leaving moist vertical lines
A knife cutting one fourth of its, waistlines
Then a quick slit to release its intestines from confines
The brown leaves fall from its round shape
Hold it over filth, using nails to scrape...
Its new filling ready to be reshaped
Scattered the devil's green with alert
Now, slowly grabbing one side and connecting both ends
Slide one down and commence to roll
Spiritual guidance ready to teach a soul
A lesson learned in the street, smart to attend
A life only know in the city
Shared with brothers, never grimy
Philosophical speeches...Never mind me
Dark, Grey mists hide the truth blindly
A path in front lit by one end brightly
Helped by a last hits of nicotine
Damaging my dreams
Polluted lungs since age thirteen
An unpredictable addiction it seems
Peach flavored smoke denying my pleas
And to cure this pain all I need are Phillies and trees...

-comments?

[Nan]

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...88#post1404788

[conquistador]

I wish I knew what the hell you were talking about...but anyway you can rhyme but of what? who knows? I am the most confused I have ever been

[Dios de Hip Hop]

wow.
pretty nice
cept the structure sucked and the flow
choppy, a good try for a new guy
but u got a lot of elevating to achieve
if its good for you then its all good.
and if ur writeing for u nice. but choose
who u aim to please. real basic lines.
check out a few of the legends
: rb legends.

-and1