Philosophy by B-Lo Fifty
This is one of my very short poems
Day in and day out....my philosophy changes,
But it is just the way I am thinking,
All of a sudden my knowledge starts sinking,
Then I turn to my philosophy to help me out,
Cuz nothing can brake the cycle with MC redoubt,
Then I start rising up to my creative mood,
And know I am no nonsense and all shrewd.
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short. but i liked it. vocab was decent. structure fine. even had story telling which could be hard for a short piece. overall nicely done.
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of everything existing.Po'ethicsabstanticollective.
Hmm, its ok. Just seemed like your state of mind. Well usually i dont care about the length of a poem, but this is a poem with the topic of philosophy and I think it should be a bit longer. Vocab(like said before) was decent, structure was good, and rhyme scheme was good. There wasnt much emotion to feel, except one of confusion, which does go well with the topic. I think its ok, i just wish it was longer and had deeper emotion.
~sleepy~
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I agree with above....the length of the poem does not count but you shoulda made this one longer since it was based on philosophy. Word structure was decent, metaphors werent quite there. Meh....average
6/10
just checked the piece...thought it was an interesting rhyme scheme.....decent piece i might have done the end differently but still nice work....
softfocus
while you write to rapbattles I perform on stage
How's it feel to lack in comparison?............
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