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    Post An Awakening

    Born foresaken, Im a vacant cloud searching for harp musicians
    Heavenly scribes arrive to nurture my hearts suspicions
    Sought 'solace' in the 'shadows', it worked cos' the 'dark' would 'listen'
    Persued the 'light' on the sabbath, went to church but the 'spark' was missin
    I tried rubbin Buddha bellies, and four leaf clovers
    'Knocked' two years off, trina preach Jehovah
    Jesus said that he would emulate the feats of Jonah
    But resurrection means; deceased who rose up!
    See Jonah was asleep when he was inside the whale
    I guess the Gospel writers thought that Jonah died in the tale
    Contradictions equal fiction, and fiction breeds confusion
    What are my thoughts on crucifixion? Fantasies, illusions
    Claimin' he was God's the same as worshippin' 'cows'
    Even these Hindu dudes feel me, Indians 'jerkin' they brows
    The proud scribes said "Be thankful for the skill that He gave you!"
    Then handed me a quill from the wings of an angel
    Now I'm hurling metaphorical rocks, at David's Star
    Screaming at you heathens "Praise Allah!!"
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    No I dont hate christians....before I get hate replies. Just a concept I thought of....I do hate jews tough lol

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    nice start for a neebie, this was good ya had good flow and structure was ok, and the topic was also ok, keep it up.
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    thanx

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    Flow was alright - could probably use a little work to even it out some. Vocab' level was good - looked like you put some thought behind the piece. Liked the way you used logical argument progression within. Hit my "Broken Metamorphosis" if you can.

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    Hence Forward

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    i enjoyed this..
    concise and you got your cynical views on god etc over well..
    some really nice imagery as well and a bit of humour

    'Contradictions equal fiction, and fiction breeds confusion
    What are my thoughts on crucifixion? Fantasies, illusions

    ^dope..
    no complaints man
    im of a similar view pint on religious issues to so it made alot of sense and fell into my thought process

    'The proud scribes said "Be thankful for the skill that He gave you!"
    Then handed me a quill from the wings of an angel
    ^heh..very well thought out
    with a splash of sarcasm

    u might be interested in my devils rant piece which follows a similar vein of thought


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    it's a bold statement - the new youtube

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    Uppin

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    Upping again, last one

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    c'mon people uppin for feedback

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    interesting topic. its good to know other people's perspectives on
    religion for sum odd reason. i can't really relate to yours, but it
    was still interesting. the verse itself was nice. the structure and flow
    were good, as well as the complexity. the consistency was good.
    it seemed basic but to the point. once again, the topic was interesting
    even though we don't see eye-to-eye. keep rhyming.

    hit mines up if you can.

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