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    ~*Lil' Miss Caramel*~ Calisto's Avatar
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    My glass Wonderland... it's been a minute

    Build myself a wonderland, a plotted escape from this asylum
    Glass mansions miles away; so no moron with rocks can find them

    Tea parties with euphoria on the guest list to break free of this insanity
    And keep this jungle of a world from pointing their dirty fingers at me
    Glaring through my picket fences, you can see their greedy jealousy
    As stingy fingers pluck flowers from my garden, finding them prickly
    Advancing upon the next square of my cardboard checkered reality
    Stealing any hope of function in this molded character I’ve come to be
    Orchestrating an orgy of thoughts, myriads and simple rhythmic melodies

    Build myself a wonderland, a plotted escape from this asylum
    Glass mansions miles away; so no moron with rocks can find them

    My mind, racing past my body, leveling distances my senses don’t entertain
    Touches, kisses, whispers left within me, ricocheting off the interior my brain
    Each entity feeds differently upon the being of me, slowly starving me insane
    Whilst upon your drawbridge you stand, sincerely you asking me to play, in vain
    For my life has become the sport, seldom wins and loses, but massive craters of pain
    Your rough hands may sand away my purpose immediately, but life’s still left to gain
    Savagely the thoughts inside run but subdued, my actions are not speech, and I refrain

    Build myself a wonderland, a plotted escape from this asylum
    Glass mansions miles away; so no moron with rocks can find them
    For fear that within his stones he may break me too, I crumble to him…
    Formerly known as ThundaThighz
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    "...For life is not a paragraph.
    And death I think is no parenthesis"-E.E. Cummings

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    I don't get it.

    Well... first off it had an odd, but suprisingly workable flow. I just read one word after another and it felt really smooth. There was a lot of imagry present in the whole thing too that sparked my imagination. But the last line...

    For fear that within his stones he may break me too, I crumble to him…

    It made me realize that I unfortunetly had no idea about what this peice was about. I still have no idea what it is about unfortunetly. It's there, I just can't grasp and wrap my incomprehensible mind around it. Especially since I liked reading this, I just couldn't find the meaning to it.

    ~Irenic~

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    Probably because the beginning was mad, I'd based all my hopes around one thing and then it came crashing down... I felt like my glass mansion had been shattered... Then I decided to finish this because I hadn't put up a peice in a while and I wanted to write so when I did I'm in a new relationship and I'm happy now so I guess it was a mad first stanza and a happy, doubtful second stanza... It could have been more, and better but I wanted it out of me so I wrote... thank you for the reply tho, sorry I confused ya I do that a lot to people... lol peace
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    And death I think is no parenthesis"-E.E. Cummings

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