30 Mins From now or D/Q
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30 Mins From now or D/Q
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yo you my as well sit back now cause your rap is wack
just act like ur goin campin and go home and pack
your rhymes make me sick as can be
like i was riden a rocky boat stranded in sea
this rappin shit aint fir you
this battles the same as if i was hitler and you were a jew
you cant win so just go home and cry to mom
cause im about to delete you from this cd-rom
im tired of little kids like you thinkin they good
just try to come where i live out in the hood
you couldnt survive one weak in this palce
before long someone would tear up your face
so its like the same thing here just quit right now
cause i know ur readin this rap and like wow
Seriously...you have no chance...
What the hell was that? kid watch these pulsating hits..
..cause im bringing you down quicker..
..than early ejaculating kids
Your severed, and my high impacts havent been started..
..like planes crashing from takeoff..
..where your left departed
Ive left you bloody with black bruises, by these vet fists..
..you seem to be in a lot of trouble..
..are you dennis the menace?
Im leaving this fat fuck shredded, with onslaughts on skin..
..where i stick my big foot in him..
..to show monstrous kicks
I murdered you on entrance, leaving you with little interest..
..now ive took this win with ease..
..as ive left his verse dead
oooo I cant vote on this sorry but you merked him I like your structure
lol...........................Uppin...............
Uppin for votes.........................please vote......
ill break this down
Scriptious you had no rhyme sceme whatsoever, and the entire thing sounded like shit. Nothin was ryming and refering to dennis the menace was weak. Atleast rhyme menace with grimace. U gots a lot of work to do
Fatboyjoe atleast yer shit rhymed and i could sumwhat enjoy what i was readin. I also liked the part when u refered to Hitler. The was good. I also liked to stranded to sea verse, that was a nice hit, but u still have things to work on/ both of u/
if i could vote i would vote 4 Fatboyjoe
fatboyjoe-your flow and structure was pretty boring and simple. It was below average as a verse. Your punches was very weak and there barely were personals. Matter of fact there were no personals. wordplay was boring and not exciting. Played out rhymes as well. Vocabulary and multis needs big improvement as well. Elevate
Scriptious-I was feeling your flow better than his. It could have been much better though with vocabulary. Pretty decent punches that hit fatboyjoe hard. Also, there were a few personals. Overall you had a good enough structure to win you this battle but u still need to elevate on some things.
v/Scriptious
Tomer..you suck..seriously..if you didnt see nothing in my verse your out of yah head..1-0..Uppin for more pole votes..
wow that was so gay and unedjucated...............^^Quote:
Originally Posted by TomER
what an extremely dumb vote......
ok enough of that...any fool's fool except tomer can see that scriptious ripped it...well him...but they both need improvement...fatboyjoe u need a name change and go to the help forum to improve ur punches and ish....
v/scriptious
go hit up my battle with lunk
Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation. - Ambiguous
I will vote on your battle now..cant pole though..but ill give good feedback..Uppin for more votes!..
scriptious you gotta get on peoples dick just to get votes thats sad
My last up..and what do you mean get on his dick? he voted out of his own will..im only returning the vote you peice of shit..Uppin for more votes to close this battle up..
his whole verse rhymed wow ya dumbfuck of a tomer lol
more people need to vote on this... uppin#1........
yeah it did rhyme u piece of shit /you-jew / good-hood/ wack -pack /all rhyming words u dumb fuk unless u think menace rhymes with trouble which from seein yer raps u prob do
Scrptious got this rather easily.
He has better punches. Perosnals were ok. Just work on those.
Flow was good and the structrue was good. Opener was wack,
Only becasue it was a sex line and those are wack. Closer was
good and it helped you. Good verse
Fatboy was bad. Not bad for a newb but you have to elevate
and get better. Read othger battles to get the hang of things
and use them to your advantage. You have to have punches
Flow was good and so was structrue but there were no punches
v/Scrpt
uppin #2............................................
eclipse thanks for the info........................
ill battle anyone of yall holla i make the rules holla
fat boy won cuz Scrptious didnt even fuckin ryme and that is sad, i think Fatboy is good and he should win
yo stop votin for yourself damn just look at the 11th and 14th post in my battle between himn fat shit keeps on switchin computers to vote for himelf http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show....php?p=1501471 lol your dqed and banned punk
Blah at this battle. One sided like fuck yo. Scriptious came with good punches, and they fucked Fat Joe up.
Fat Joe, you should stick to suckin' Ashanti's nipples and ridin' Ja Rule's dick yo.
Scriptious came with a good verse. Not anything "WHOA". Anyhoo, he had a few good punches, flow was almost perfect. Structure was great too. Overall, I liked his verse. It was decent.
Fatboyjoe was just wack. He came totally wack. Didn't like anything in his verse. Flow was wack. Structure were wack. Lyrical content was wack. Need I say more? No punches, nothing. You gotta elevate yo.
Overall - Scriptious obviously took this coz he had a much better verse.
V/S
lmao clearly a blowout....
you have no sort of structure.......
your lines are horrible..
id rather castrate myself with a rusty needle then to read ur horrible peice of shit u call a verse.....
anytime you think of droppin a verse....
dont....just...dont
obviously
v/script
my last up(5)........................................
Your 3rd actually..and this is not me uppin this as its up the top already..just stating he has 2 more for this..
its funny how u all get so mad about typing a poem about some one u dont even see this is not a battle this is just 2 people writting a poem about each other. HAHAHAHAHA. U ALL WOULD GET KILLED IF U REALLY BATTLE SOMEONE.
Go suck a dick and stop freeposting in my thread..like ive said..you wouldnt flow over a wave kid
what the hell "you wouldnt flow over a wave kid" hahahahaha yeah your good
Wow tomer is an idiot..........now im gunna vote
Fat BJ analysis: First and foremost, dont say hes getting DR votes. Just because the votes aren't for you, doesnt mean they are DR. Now that I got that off my chest, your verse wasnt good at all. Your flow and structure were horrible, lines varied greatly. Punches and personals were nowhere to be found. Creativity was nonexistant with lines rhyming sea and be. Overall, just elevate.
Script Analysis: Pretty good verse man, I liked the creative structure and the flow was good. The fact that you actually had punches won that one for you, and most hit. Good on creativity too, your ideas were mostly new and not played. Good verse overall, you took this EASILY
V/ Scriptous
Fatboyjoe: Your flow was off in a few places. I know this doesnt count for anything, but can u spell? You had some pretty weak punches (cd-roms can't have stuff deleted from em) and vocab could have been better. You need to improve a lot.
Scriptious: Had a much better flow and a nice structure. His punches were a lot better than FBJ's and he used his vocab quite well too. Although for some reason I found that you could have done a lot more with this battle.
Both of you did okay but are both capable of better. Scriptious did much better than Fatboyjoe and thats why he gets my vote.